The Feeling of Being Alone

My grandson gave me this first line
and said write a poem about this.
Actually he was singing the first line.

nobody knows the feeling of being alone
nobody
but me, except
when I join the noisy crowd
still, even then
I’ve a feeling
that nobody knows
how obviously still
alone
and lonelier still
and sadder even
as the crowd
moves in claustrophobic circles
and I draw back
until a familiar voice
my own
dares to brave
a “hello”
dash a smile
at another lonely soul

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Date: 11/1/2024 11:51:00 AM
Totally beautiful write, Kim.. You point out gently how we need others, so poetically done! Wow!! Pangie
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/1/2024 12:57:00 PM
Thank you so much, Pangie!
Date: 10/28/2024 3:27:00 AM
Sounds like you shared a sweet moment together dealing with loneliness. The word, 'nobody' shares the long 'o' of alone, and chimes in this poem to let me the reader enter in. Knowing the back-story sweetens it even more when the gentle bravery comes in. J :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/28/2024 5:27:00 AM
Thank you, Jeanette! :)
Date: 10/27/2024 11:45:00 PM
Your last two lines are so emotive. Indeed it costs nothing to give a stranger a welcoming smile. It may make all the difference to their mood of the day. Well said dear Kim - Hugs Maria
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/28/2024 5:26:00 AM
Truly! I have seen a make a difference! Bless you!
Date: 10/27/2024 7:23:00 PM
This is a soulful poem. Socializing is an art. I enjoyed reading it.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2024 7:40:00 PM
Thank you, Hilda!
Date: 10/27/2024 5:02:00 PM
A beautiful poem! It's so nice that all it takes is two kindred spirits to banish loneliness. What an intriguing and interesting first line your grandson provided! Very best wishes. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2024 5:16:00 PM
Thank you! He will love to hear that. Yes, it takes two. Nice comment, Evelyn!
Date: 10/27/2024 2:17:00 PM
So sweet and cute, dear Kim! Your grandson must be a delight- like you. We all must struggle to be connected. <3 Hugs-
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/27/2024 4:08:00 PM
I love when any of my grandkids find a poetry coonection. They are listening. One granddaughter, when she started college, texted me that her professor was a poetry laureate. Some good poetry. Thank you and for your PS friendship <3
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