The Evil Elixir

He's up in the morning at 7 a.m.
Black coffee and paper. Toast and jam
His hair is perfection. His tie is secure
He's ready to take on the day

From home to the office, a 90 minute trip
Dumbass drivers and cell phone quips
Thoughts for the job that race through his head
To help earn himself better pay

A tiger by nine, he's doing just fine
Then noon brings a lunch that's followed by wine
From one until five he then starts to morph
When it's off to the bar for some more

A couple of shots with a beer back to boot
Three hours later he's got a full snoot
An illegal drive from the bar to his home
Now he can really tie one on

The morning sun shines on the man he should be
The evening brings a change by degree
The evil elixir turns man to a monster
With all sense of sanity gone


Rockman


For the "Dr. Jekyll And Mr. Hyde" contest by Yasmin Khan

7th place winner.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 4/8/2012 9:54:00 AM
Great poem Rockman! The title drew me to the poem and the poem was even better ...Samia
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Date: 3/31/2012 4:55:00 PM
The morning sun shines on the man he should be---Poignant! U Rocked this one Man. Pun Definitely intended!
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Date: 3/19/2012 5:55:00 PM
AM he's OK and by night he's stewed. Great title and content for a poem that applies to so many. All the best in the contest Rockman! :)
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Date: 3/14/2012 5:51:00 AM
Congrats are in order I see. Well, I just like the poem...how it touches on so many points. Great rhythm and rhyme also...it sang down the page. It is an EVIL elixir !! Think I'll read a few more of yours...
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Date: 3/9/2012 11:43:00 AM
Rockman congrats on your win,evil elixir eh..David
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Date: 3/9/2012 9:40:00 AM
congrats Rockman on a stupendous write and win on this eerie personality legend.. luv.. amazing lines to mesmerize for reader luv..
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Date: 3/9/2012 6:40:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in Yasmin's contest Rockman. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/5/2012 7:20:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your outstanding piece of poetry today Rockman. I hope this new week ahead proves fruitful to you within your life and in your poetry also. Love, Carol
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