The Evening Could Not Be Better

I fork my medium rare steak
And put it into my mouth
Everything is settled and nice
The evening could not be better
My husband insists I say the prayer
After all, he hasn’t the tongue to speak
I whisper, “God was never there”
And I listen for the slightest shriek
But like God, they are all silent
In unison of emptiness
The little ones eat so little these days, dear
With their silly ipods and cellphones
Daddy will agree in drones
They’re useless little pigs…
All of my children are so quiet
So well behaved—SILENT
 
You are so well behaved tonight…
I eat them all raw and stare
Daddy always wanted me to say the prayer
But without you…without you there
The evening could not be better
You useless Pig…

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 10/19/2012 7:40:00 AM
powerful is this, Laura, love the twist, awesome....
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Date: 10/18/2012 9:55:00 PM
Wow, very thought provoking and full of dark imagery. I enjoyed reading a lot. Great write.
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Date: 10/18/2012 2:25:00 PM
Great stuff...there's angst in this poem which I dig a lot. A poem very much likable & favable. <--- is that even a word?!?!?!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/18/2012 4:53:00 PM
Now it is, Jonas. ;) Thanks--glad yah liked it!
Date: 10/17/2012 9:00:00 PM
Sincere, honest, touching and beautiful.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/18/2012 4:53:00 PM
Thanks! :D
Date: 10/17/2012 7:19:00 PM
wow....this one paints a vivid picture, good poem, i enjoyed reading this one!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/18/2012 4:54:00 PM
So glad you enjoyed! Love your stuff by the way...
Date: 10/17/2012 9:56:00 AM
It took me a while to really understand what was going on here, but now that I get it, I really like it! a twisted poem :)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/18/2012 4:54:00 PM
It's kinda one of those things where yah get it...but you're not entirely sure. Glad you figured it out! ^^
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