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The Empty Abyss

The world spins, confusion in the fog That refuses to lift, day and night Not a clear answer can be seen An obstacle course to get through One thing at a time, seeking to find A string of hope here and there - A touch of breeze - - A ray of sunlight - - A pretty flower - Holding onto any reminder of simplicity To comfort the restless, lost, soul Love is at a distance, unreachable As the walls get higher and higher Fear clutching every ounce of being - Trapped by doubt - Loneliness then paralyzes the soul, Where spinning stops, in the empty abyss Heidi Sands 7/18/18

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Date: 7/19/2018 10:31:00 AM
Heidi, your poem is indeed deeply thought provoking and beautiful in its expressive emotional imagery that stirs and reaches my heart. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/19/2018 11:12:00 AM
Hi Susan. I appreciate your visit and kind comment. Thank you :)
Date: 7/19/2018 8:51:00 AM
Whoa, a deep and paralyzing piece.. without hope, we are doomed!
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/19/2018 9:17:00 AM
Yes, we must always have hope. Thank you Lyric Man :)
Date: 7/18/2018 6:05:00 PM
The mind lost in a fog seeking a clear path through..Well written Heidi
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/18/2018 10:11:00 PM
That's right. Thank you :)
Date: 7/18/2018 4:11:00 PM
You dove deep with this one Heidi, well done...
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/18/2018 10:11:00 PM
Thank you Charlie :)
Date: 7/18/2018 3:04:00 PM
When fear and loneliness occupy us...hope is the guiding light that shows the way..so many emotions you captured in this melancholy poem.
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/18/2018 3:27:00 PM
Yes, that's true Vijay. Thank you for your kind feed back :)
Date: 7/18/2018 2:32:00 PM
Life can indeed be an obstacle course sometimes and yes the walls sometimes close in but there's always a way out in the end.
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/18/2018 2:36:00 PM
Yes, somehow we find a way out. Thank you Tom. I appreciate your comment :)
Date: 7/18/2018 2:08:00 PM
Hello Heidi, A most excellent Free Verse!! Your final two verses are most compelling. Thoroughly enjoyed your poem. A FAVE TOO!! Best Wishes, Gary
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Heidi Sands
Date: 7/18/2018 2:17:00 PM
Thank you so much Gary! I am happy to hear this and appreciate your comment and Fave ! :)

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