Fabiyas M V Poet Rhyme

The Elephant Fort

Black beauties in chains-
Before the ticket counters,
A long queue does creep
To scatter near the black wonders.

Ears and tails always move,
Ruminating the rhythms of forest.
Elephants are inside the fort,
Exposed to the sky barest.

I hear the hushed emotions
In the clinking of chains.
Hearts  smoulder in;
Eyes emit lava of pains.

Burning red wild flowers
And tickling streams,
Each elephant longs I know:
But chains kill dreams.


FABIYAS M V

(Anakotta(a fort for the elephants) at Punathur, Guruvayur, Kerala,India is a tourist 
place, where you see a large number of elephants together. All are chained.)

First place winner in 'Your(own) Favorite Poem' contest by Destroyer A poet(PD)

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Carol Sunshine Brown March 9, 2012 at 8:42 AM It is always a pleasure to read your poetry Fab. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on mine. Love, Carol

Bl Devnath December 24, 2011 at 6:38 AM Really it was wonderful which I had missed. Thanks God reminded me to read this yours. Wish you Sweet Happy Christmas day and Happy New Year 2012. bl

Poet Destroyer A September 28, 2011 at 8:58 AM oooo! I'm Sorry FAB,,,, i called you BOB,,, i don';t know why i called you bob... Is it okay to call you FAB,,, for short... or is there another short name.. i can initial you with if you don't mind..lol... how about bob...kidding..kidding... sorry i woke up in a good spirit...xooxox,..p.d.

Poet Destroyer A September 28, 2011 at 8:19 AM Dear Bob, ( again ) * here is another contest I did not congratulate..., stopping by AGAIN to give warm congratulations on my old contest. Sorry, I forgot to leave you a thank you *comment* of appreciation~ I hope you don't mind my copy paste congratulations.. Don't worry I have read this many times. lol. or how else would have I closed it with out reading. Can you accept my apology and old congrats on your poem. .p.d. the late bloomer

Carol Sunshine Brown September 21, 2011 at 2:57 PM Congratulations on your win in the contest of P.D. "Your (OWN) Favorite Poem" Fabiyas. Love, Carol

Lee Ramage September 21, 2011 at 12:26 AM Congratulations on your first place win. I too, love elephants and actually collect statues and carvings of elephants. I have about 40 different ones. It is a great poem, no wonder it is your favourite. Lee

Fabiyas M V September 20, 2011 at 11:46 PM Thanks to all who supported and encouraged me.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 20, 2011 at 6:39 PM Congrats Fabiyas on a first place win with this excellent entry my friend.. awesome ..luv..

Debbie Guzzi September 20, 2011 at 5:08 PM a sad state of affairs! congrad's light & Love

Paul Beadnall September 20, 2011 at 3:35 PM Tremendous a well deserved top of tree placing.. blessings from Paul.

Poesy Poesy September 20, 2011 at 2:26 PM Great work. Congratulations.

Bob Quigley September 20, 2011 at 12:42 PM A very stirring write. Congratulations on your first place win. Well done

Dr.Ram Mehta September 20, 2011 at 12:23 PM Congratultions on the first place win in the contest of P.D., Fabiyas

Carol Sunshine Brown September 8, 2011 at 8:55 AM Stopping by your excellent poetry today to thank you for your kind comments on mine Fabiyas. Love, Carol

Caryl Ramsdale September 4, 2011 at 10:42 AM "Ears and tails always move, Ruminating rhythms of forest." "Each elephant longs I know: But chains kill the dreams." Powerful lines...loved it! CR

Anthony Barrow April 10, 2011 at 5:44 PM INTERESTING WRITE

Andrea Dietrich April 10, 2011 at 3:17 PM Wow,you were very inspired and wrote an excellent poem, Fabiyas! Maybe one for the big soup contest!

Diane Locksley April 10, 2011 at 12:21 PM Your poem made me feel so sad Fabiyas. Animals deserve to roam in the wild. You described the elephants' plight so well. Best to you, Diane

Carolyn Devonshire April 10, 2011 at 9:35 AM Fabiyas, I hate to think of elephants (or any other animals) in chains. No wonder their "eyes emit lava of pains." A sad but beautifully written poem! Love, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K. April 10, 2011 at 9:23 AM This must be such a sight to behold, Fabiyas and I can't help but feel for those elephants-- that must be sad to see as well though-- thank you for sharing and for your inspiring comment in my poem :)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 10, 2011 at 6:44 AM FABIYAS .. an excellent write and description of the elephants ..so colorful and those chains seem sad to hold these lovely animals without freedom to roam... I was just thinking about u yesterday my friend and here u are commenting on my contest entry so sweetly.. yes yoga is a great source of inspiration and depth for life for me... hope to see and hear from u more and more luv.. happy Sunday..

Michelle Mac Donald April 10, 2011 at 6:08 AM So terribly sad for these elephants, Fabiyas. Chained and imprisoned, as though they'd commited some dreadful crime.:( Elephants are so kind and family oriented...how they must pine for each other. You've painted a dismal scene, with you own kindness and concern. Blessings to you, Fabiyas. Mikki

Dr.Ram Mehta April 10, 2011 at 6:04 AM I enjoyed the sight and smell of kerala, Fabiyas. How are you? seen after a long time.

Nette Onclaud April 10, 2011 at 4:37 AM truly delighted by this eloquent offering, fabiyas... awesome telling of your culture's intricacies! :) huggs, nette