The Drunken

The Drunken... 


I‘m the drunken, drinking the dew, 
Flashing my wings, purple and blue.
Breeze is coming, bringing his wine,
Cup after cup, thinking of you.
He’ll be here; maybe he is there,
He is everywhere, through and through.
My lover with his faceless face;
Told me that his love is pure and true.
He loves all lovers, endless love,
I am urging you to pursue.
I'm the candle, he is the light,
He is the fire, so love renew.
I may be insane, preaching love,
I'm calling him; what else can do?
Dance with his shadow, swim in light,
If you follow me, you’ll do too.
I am the drunken he's the wine,
I’m gullible; it means “Haloo.”
7/12/16 Haloo

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Date: 9/24/2016 10:14:00 AM
Inebriated rhyme and rhythm here, Pashang. Give me some more. ;-)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/29/2016 6:05:00 PM
You are always welcome.... I'm too drunk
Date: 8/26/2016 8:52:00 AM
Fabulous rhythm and rhyme. Those first two lines just roll off the tongue, and the poem flows, so nicely. Well done.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/28/2016 3:25:00 PM
Thanks Scott..
Date: 8/7/2016 8:20:00 AM
I love the rhythm of this form... I'll check it out and maybe give it a try :) This is really good!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/7/2016 11:14:00 AM
Thanks Rebecca...Please do..
Date: 7/30/2016 8:21:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your work..If I remember correctly Ghazal is not so easy to write..I need to look at that form again..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/30/2016 11:06:00 AM
Thank you Sara.... You're always welcome...
Date: 7/28/2016 10:02:00 AM
A very lovely Ghazal Pashang! I am not too familar with this form and have never written one. Cheers, Connie ; )
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/29/2016 1:31:00 AM
Thank you Connie. If you need help email me....
Date: 7/28/2016 8:35:00 AM
Brilliantly composed beautiful lines dear friend. Your entire poem maintains a sweet flow with the depths of love in every line. Thank you for your kind words on my India Poem translation. Love and best wishes ....Ravindra K Kapoor
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/29/2016 1:30:00 AM
Thank you my friend...
Date: 7/28/2016 1:56:00 AM
this reminds me of that ancient mythical Pan or some creature that loved wine. I sure enjoyed this.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/29/2016 1:29:00 AM
Thanks Andrea
Date: 7/28/2016 1:55:00 AM
Pashang, I'd love to do a ghazal but alot going on in my life and I can barely keep up here with normal things. HOpefully when my life becomes normal again. let me read THIS now.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/29/2016 1:29:00 AM
I'll be waiting....
Date: 7/26/2016 1:35:00 AM
Well done ghazal my friend...I enjoyed reading it...god bless...WW
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/27/2016 2:47:00 AM
Thank you my great warrior friend.....
Date: 7/13/2016 5:12:00 PM
great ghazal, Pashang. Love that first line!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/14/2016 12:42:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, do a ghazal for me... you're great at it.
Date: 7/13/2016 1:09:00 PM
Well done. Immaculate Ghazal. Maintaining the Qafia in English is a feat which uou have successfully performed. Keep it up. Thanks for visiting my poem Termite of Time and for your appreciation. In fact the poem is a translation of my Urdu Ghazal from my book Ashhab-e-khayal. That is why I classified it as Ghazal giving it a title unlike Ghazals. Had it not been a translation I would have classified it as couplet but not Masnavi. The poem is not even near a Masnavi. Regards
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/14/2016 12:40:00 AM
Thank you Mohammad..
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