Get Your Premium Membership

The Dress You Chose

How lovely you look in that perfect dress you chose rosy lips, in pout lit smile likened to love's dawn that would be heart's best day won were it my hand that held yours

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 1/15/2020 1:16:00 AM
beautiful but sad at the same time. I especially love the line 'lit smile likened to love's dawn' :-) hugs Jan xx
Login to Reply
Date: 1/4/2020 8:46:00 AM
Did she accept the invitation? I suspect the dress may not have been worn for very long. ;0)
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/4/2020 11:43:00 AM
Richard, Thanks for dropping by. Some of the comments struck a sadder note. As he watched her walk away hand in hand with someone else. Is the glass half full or half empty(?) -Richard
Date: 1/2/2020 7:01:00 AM
Wow, very romantic and smooth. I like it. Richard you have a way with words. Nicely done.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/27/2019 7:13:00 PM
Love lost gives some of the best material. Amazing!
Login to Reply
Date: 12/25/2019 11:49:00 AM
Lovely, Richard. Merry Christmas! Best wishes to you and your loved ones for 2020.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/25/2019 5:48:00 AM
Gorgeous!
Login to Reply
Date: 12/24/2019 5:15:00 AM
That is beautiful and so sad at the same time. I hope that life is still good for you. Kind wishes, Kai
Login to Reply
Date: 12/22/2019 12:26:00 PM
oh if only... sometimes we can only admire from a distance..
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/4/2020 12:27:00 PM
Silent One, Thank you. I think you've hit on the essence of this Tanka turned FV (had too many lines so had to change). "[ Your comment would make a better title too. Happy Saturday. -Richard
Date: 12/21/2019 11:16:00 PM
This is lovely.
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/4/2020 11:49:00 AM
Juliet, Thank you for this comment. I really enjoyed your Lay poem 'Your Coffee Locks'. -Richard
Date: 12/20/2019 11:30:00 AM
Aw, beautifully penned.
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/4/2020 11:51:00 AM
M.L., Thanks for stopping by. Happy New Year. -Richard
Date: 12/19/2019 12:37:00 AM
So beautifully sad, Richard. But lovely just the same.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/18/2019 10:40:00 AM
A perfect write in every way! And a FAV )) Panagiota xxx
Login to Reply
Date: 12/18/2019 7:50:00 AM
Ahh Richard this was a sweet little poem!;)
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/4/2020 12:28:00 PM
Thanks Brenda. Sweet of you to say that. Happy Saturday. -Richard
Date: 12/18/2019 4:53:00 AM
That last line with it's let-down disappointment was perfect! Many thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Best to you in your writing endeavors. / M
Login to Reply
Date: 12/17/2019 4:51:00 PM
Wow... swoon... excellent... (felt so renaissance...) Ann
Login to Reply
Date: 12/17/2019 1:02:00 PM
- Lovely written, Richard :) - I wish you and your loved ones a wonderful Christmas :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Login to Reply
Date: 12/16/2019 12:48:00 PM
Short but lovely, romantic...with a sprinkling of longing. Regards // paul
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 12/19/2019 9:39:00 AM
Paul, Thanks for catching the sixth line over-sight. Pity though , I was so proud of my first Tanka. Try, try again. -Richard
Date: 12/16/2019 6:21:00 AM
Love the ending--a charming write, Richard.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/15/2019 10:43:00 PM
Lovely with unexpected twist.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/15/2019 9:20:00 PM
Lovely Richard.. Romantic Tanka..
Login to Reply
Date: 12/15/2019 8:07:00 PM
beautiful and romantic Richard... nicely penned... hugs
Login to Reply
Date: 12/15/2019 7:21:00 PM
Tender and romantic my friend, Richard. When we hold the hand of the person we love everything is just perfect. Blessings
Login to Reply
Date: 12/15/2019 5:40:00 PM
hey make this a blue dress and you've got an entry in the blue dress contest!!!
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 12/15/2019 5:58:00 PM
Andrea, There is a blue dress contest? That comes close to perfect. -Richard
Date: 12/15/2019 5:37:00 PM
Nicely put Richard Thanks for sharing
Login to Reply
Theraven Avatar
Quoth Theraven
Date: 12/15/2019 5:56:00 PM
Greg, I played with Tonka toys as a boy. Now it's Tanka's time in play. -Richard

Book: Shattered Sighs