Johnny Ryun Poet Rhyme

The Dream

The black knight shines when I close my eyes
The mist rolls round a strange new disguise
A faraway land the faces so real
A thousand mystic sunsets glaring off my steel
A maiden calls out tied to a tree
An offering for the beast who dwells beneath the sea
The warrior stands alone
His armour shines of gold
Weilding the sword of Vengance handed down from old
The challenge was met,the maiden set free
But it was only a dream
Inspired by you for me

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Maxeen Dennis February 7, 2012 at 8:46 AM I love this dream, a worrior saves the maiden. Great Job!

Carol Sunshine Brown February 7, 2012 at 5:19 AM A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Johnny. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love, Carol

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2012 at 3:52 AM Johnny it is a wery good poem, I like it. - oxox love Anne-Lise

Robert Pettit February 6, 2012 at 10:14 PM Reads like you are describing Perseus and Andromeda here. Your entry displays good descriptiveness and rhyming. However, this work is much too long to be considered a crystalline poem. A crystalline is usually only a one-line poem with no more than seventeen syllables total. This is more like a "rhyme" poem.