The Dilatory Thought

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I used head rhyme in couplet form in my poem.

Head rhyme (also called initial rhyme) is where the rhyming words are each at the beginning of the lines—they do not necessarily have to be alliterate, ie grab/grub, etc. On the other hand, first-word rhyme is where the feminine syllables may be silent, ie the words rhyme in their stressed syllables.

Poetic form: Golden Shovel

N/A in Craig's contest. Title of poem now changed.

Blessed in abundance that manifests in our stressed daily interaction with our fellow man, and the sincerest form of our inner wellbeing is the outpour of laughter. Dormant in the face of adversity, while we empathise with modern populace at large and try to bring some modicum of humanity and relief of the pain. We’d all experience this from time to time and this is seed of essence in our reality that is forever fraught. Felled by ulterior motives – punished like Sisyphus by our fellow peers – as the dulcet tones of compliments, the sweetest wrung encouragement that soothed our souls like songs sung at our cradle; the melodies now forgotten. They are symbols indelibly edged into our subconscious and those cymbals that tend to want to drown us out so that we spin in the vortex, but vector us towards the stories to tell. Be it to explain the tumultuous emotions raging beneath the surface of our designer exterior – this is by far the saddest hour and we, eventually, rather opt for the dilatory thought. Our sincerest laughter With some pain is fraught; Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought. Percy Bysshe Shelly – To a Skylark

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Bill Baker

Date: 9/27/2023 3:33:00 PM

Excellent poetry, Suzette. The explanation of "head rhyme" was informative and a learning experience for me. Thank you for sharing your knowledge of creating poetry and the forms. Your depth of thought was thought-provoking and will give many of us things to think about. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill p.s. I'm following your poetry now and will read more of your blogs as I find time.

Suzette Richards
Date: 9/29/2023 8:37:00 AM

I aim to please, Bill. Thank you for the compliment:)

Tom Woody

Date: 9/19/2023 5:58:00 AM

Ahhh.. what if we all wrote out our deepest darkest feelings and secrets? Exposed ourselves that way? What would be the reaction and response? I shudder to even think about it, so I mostly stick with writing fiction. Safer. Great stuff

Suzette Richards
Date: 9/19/2023 6:42:00 AM

Yip! Fiction is far more palatable:)

Silent One

Date: 9/17/2023 4:40:00 AM

What an excellent arrangement of words.. such imagery.. lovely poetry my friend..

Suzette Richards
Date: 9/17/2023 5:00:00 AM

Thank you, SO. You bring joy to my day with this thoughtful comment :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/16/2023 10:22:00 AM

I love that quote by Shelley... I used it as inspiration for one of my poems a few years back... You've done it justice with this heartfelt and beautiful piece... We all do need to experience sadness in order to overcome it, I think :)

Suzette Richards
Date: 9/16/2023 12:10:00 PM

Thank you, Kelly. Yes. I think that you are right: We only get to appreciate to value of happiness once we work through the inevitable sadness we encountered.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/10/2023 5:49:00 AM

You've truly conveyed some very deep, soul stirring, profound, heartfelt and evocative emotions here.. The myriad depth of this piece has truly held my heart in marvel.. "Our sincerest laughter with some pain is fraught " True our most sweetest songs are the ones which have the most grieving story to tell.. There are so many lines which I loved here "we spin in the vortex", "soothed our souls like songs sung at our cradle.. " Just beyond brilliant..

Suzette Richards
Date: 9/10/2023 6:04:00 AM

Thank you for reading and your in-depth appreciation of my attempt to convey the essence of the quoted lines, Hiya.