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I used head rhyme in couplet form in my poem.

Head rhyme (also called initial rhyme) is where the rhyming words are each at the beginning of the lines—they do not necessarily have to be alliterate, ie grab/grub, etc. On the other hand, first-word rhyme is where the feminine syllables may be silent, ie the words rhyme in their stressed syllables.

Poetic form: Golden Shovel

N/A in Craig's contest. Title of poem now changed.

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The Dilatory Thought

Blessed in abundance that manifests in our 
stressed daily interaction with our fellow man, and the sincerest 
form of our inner wellbeing is the outpour of laughter.
Dormant in the face of adversity, while we empathise with 
modern populace at large and try to bring some 
modicum of humanity and relief of the pain. 
We’d all experience this from time to time and this is 
seed of essence in our reality that is forever fraught.
Felled by ulterior motives – punished like Sisyphus by our 
fellow peers – as the dulcet tones of compliments, the sweetest 
wrung encouragement that soothed our souls like songs 
sung at our cradle; the melodies now forgotten. They are 
symbols indelibly edged into our subconscious and those 
cymbals that tend to want to drown us out so that 
we spin in the vortex, but vector us towards the stories to tell.
Be it to explain the tumultuous emotions raging beneath the surface of 
our designer exterior – this is by far the saddest
hour and we, eventually, rather opt for the dilatory thought.

Our sincerest laughter
With some pain is fraught;
Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought.
    Percy Bysshe Shelly – To a Skylark

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Bill Baker September 27, 2023 at 3:33 PM Excellent poetry, Suzette. The explanation of "head rhyme" was informative and a learning experience for me. Thank you for sharing your knowledge of creating poetry and the forms. Your depth of thought was thought-provoking and will give many of us things to think about. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill p.s. I'm following your poetry now and will read more of your blogs as I find time. Suzette Richards September 29, 2023 at 8:37 AM I aim to please, Bill. Thank you for the compliment:)

Ink Empress September 24, 2023 at 4:26 AM Wow i am in awe of your poetic skills! This form was so tricky to do, it took me two days to finish as i had to pay attention but was so fun learning, and here you are doing head rhymes? Which means first words rhyme? How clever and creative is that. A deep meaningful write so well crafted. I would like to oneday try writing too like that! Absolutely stunning and captivating! Loved this! Fave for me Suzette Richards September 29, 2023 at 8:37 AM Thank you for the compliment, Ink :)

Silent One September 17, 2023 at 4:40 AM What an excellent arrangement of words.. such imagery.. lovely poetry my friend.. Suzette Richards September 17, 2023 at 5:00 AM Thank you, SO. You bring joy to my day with this thoughtful comment :)

Kelly Deschler September 16, 2023 at 10:22 AM I love that quote by Shelley... I used it as inspiration for one of my poems a few years back... You've done it justice with this heartfelt and beautiful piece... We all do need to experience sadness in order to overcome it, I think :) Suzette Richards September 16, 2023 at 12:10 PM Thank you, Kelly. Yes. I think that you are right: We only get to appreciate to value of happiness once we work through the inevitable sadness we encountered.

Hiya Sharma September 10, 2023 at 5:49 AM You've truly conveyed some very deep, soul stirring, profound, heartfelt and evocative emotions here.. The myriad depth of this piece has truly held my heart in marvel.. "Our sincerest laughter with some pain is fraught " True our most sweetest songs are the ones which have the most grieving story to tell.. There are so many lines which I loved here "we spin in the vortex", "soothed our souls like songs sung at our cradle.. " Just beyond brilliant.. Suzette Richards September 10, 2023 at 6:04 AM Thank you for reading and your in-depth appreciation of my attempt to convey the essence of the quoted lines, Hiya.