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The Depths

I

The depth of steep, hellish ascent
darkness abides, the peak obscene.
cliffhanger of sweat, the creature bent
attempting to climb, make a dent.
No wind brushes away the hair in her eyes.
She recalls nothing of birdsong or sunrise.
A hunchback of time, minutes pass slowly.
Diamonds glitter, the sun beats boldly.
Like a desert walk the road is parched.
With a sting of bumblebees she marched.

II

Delightful descent of diamondiferous slide.
Easy-peasy pleasant, air-conditioned ride.
Beautiful petals of friends, flutter of wings,
a moon full of stars, the universe sings.
Bare feet, toes polished bright pinks and reds.
Canopied four-posters, wide open beds.
Trees with jade and ruby candies, sweet
to the tongue, as she tells of her wild treat
life, retreat with angel feathers, falling
for her many handsome men, wailing
on her silken sheets as she says so long
to the coddlesome place she knows she belongs.

III

Suddenly the slide falls out, the flames shoot up.
She drinks the potent blood from her chalice cup.
As her fear and anger explode, the fire grows hotter.
The ground like a hurricane ship, teeter-totters. Sinks.

IV

Her twin stands tall, as a snowy white sail;
blue skies, the eyes of God, she hails.
All torment wiped from her brow, she’s strong
She climbed upwards by the narrow way.

V

Don’t take the easy ride. It’s a bottomless pit.
Fly to heights of eagles wings - the depth of eternal lift.

3/13/2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Pettit Avatar
March 15, 2021 at 11:57 AM
Such an impressive write. Enjoyed reading this one.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 15, 2021 at 3:11 PM
Thank you so much, Robert!
Wolf Avatar
March 14, 2021 at 6:13 PM
AMAZING! ~ gw
Rodrigues Avatar
March 15, 2021 at 4:16 AM
Thank you, Gershon!
Koplin Avatar
March 14, 2021 at 6:19 AM
I love the positive message. I so enjoyed reading this Kim! Awesome job!
Rodrigues Avatar
March 14, 2021 at 12:48 PM
Thank you, Mark!
Krutsinger Avatar
March 14, 2021 at 5:24 AM
Kim, your imagery is exquisitely penned. Beautiful poem and gorgeously done.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 14, 2021 at 5:32 AM
Thank you so much, my friend!
Kiser Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 5:04 PM
Powerful imagery in this piece, sometimes those depths feel as if we're never coming up and then, nature has a way of lightening many loads. Beautiful.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 6:43 PM
Thanks for your insightful comment :) Springtime is nearly here!
Lamoureux Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 7:10 AM
I enjoyed this contemplative write. This is one that is more impactful with concurrent reads. ;0)
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:33 AM
Thanks so much, Richard! I was walking the hills in my neighborhood when I came up with this one. Happy Springtime!
Seeker Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 6:56 AM
No moments to steal, when each point of the Ferris wheel has equal appeal ~ enjoyed this reflective muse
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:35 AM
With suffering comes strength we never knew we had, found in the one who created us. There is pain in the downslide too but it is not sanctioned.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:31 AM
With suffering comes strength we never knew we had, found in the one who created us. There is pain in the downslide too but it is not sanctioned. Thank you! Happy Spring! It’s almost here!
Jayasankar Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 6:34 AM
A beautiful poem with great thoughts Kim.. specially the last two lines.. Hugs.. ~ Ani
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:29 AM
Thank you, Anitha! Hugs!
Buhagiar Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 6:34 AM
A deep poem that needs pondering. The narrow road is always the best.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:29 AM
The narrow way may seem constraining but the other way is the pits! God bless you, dear one!
Mcintosh Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 5:53 AM
Definitely better to follow the narrow path that leads to heaven... enjoyed your write. God bless you with love, Gina
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:27 AM
So true! God bless you! Springtime’s in the air!
Kendrick Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 5:53 AM
Yes, the easy ride and wide way can lead to destruction and eternal doom. Enjoyed reading your creative work. Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 9:28 AM
When the road’s not bumpy, you could be on a dangerous path! Happy Springtime...days away now!
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