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  1-1-19
  Rhyme Time 7- Deep and Dark Contest
  Sponsor: Lu Loo

As a soul free falls into the celestial mist A distant star will dim its light Its luster vanishing into a black hole's grist, Yet dawn will inhale a cosmic breath To ease the darkness of the depth of death As the soul takes perpetual flight How deep the grief which brings the tears And heavy the heart laden with sorrow Yet the pain will surpass the years As the depths of despair take its toll Shattering what was once whole And scattering the pieces into the morrow

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Date: 11/23/2023 6:02:00 AM
Congratulations Joseph on having your poem featured on the home page:)
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Date: 1/15/2019 6:57:00 PM
This tugs at my heart. I feel each word, every emotion so deeply. Reading this again, and still this thought- "A distant star will dim its light" wraps gently around me. Congratulations Joseph, on this win. ~ Brandy
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Date: 1/15/2019 4:16:00 PM
Writing about death can in come many forms, Joseph. You ably tackled yours with a balanced emotional display. Congratulations on placing first. Regards // paul
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Joseph May
Date: 1/15/2019 4:46:00 PM
Thank you Paul
Date: 1/14/2019 11:56:00 PM
A beautiful poem Joseph and such deep depth into death or what death could be like - the way you describe it is like a journey to look forward to! Excellent write and congratulations galore for a much deserved 1st placing. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/15/2019 4:45:00 PM
Thank you Jennifer.. Not a joyful journey
Date: 1/2/2019 9:50:00 PM
"A distant star will dim its light" This thought touches me so deeply, and in many ways. Even with a touch of sadness, this is beautiful and tender. ~ Brandy
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Joseph May
Date: 1/15/2019 4:43:00 PM
Thank you Brandy
Date: 1/2/2019 1:00:00 PM
but was I right about that? There were at least five titles . Anyway, I see you retitled it, so I must have been right!!
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Joseph May
Date: 1/2/2019 2:06:00 PM
Yes you were Andrea..thanks
Date: 1/1/2019 6:28:00 PM
Is this one for Lu Loo's contest? You did a great job with the rhyme scheme. I did not recall scattered pieces as one of the given themes. I think you are the first one I have read that chose that theme You did it well.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 8:05:00 PM
Thank you Andrea, I will have to change title..hugs
Date: 1/1/2019 10:25:00 AM
This is a great example of a difficult rhyme scheme working. You must have a keen mind to work up a beautiful write like this, beyond my capabilities. You're on the top of your game with this write Joseph!
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 12:46:00 PM
Thank you John..I think you could do this with ease!...Have a wonderful and blessed New Year..
Date: 1/1/2019 9:54:00 AM
a beautiful sliver of john of the cross' ' dark night of the soul...' very good write, joseph.... happy 2019 and hugggs
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 12:43:00 PM
Thank you Nette..Happy 2019..
Date: 1/1/2019 7:35:00 AM
A saddened tone.. but excellent flow and rhythm..and so many powerful lines. An exceptional poem, Joseph.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 8:10:00 AM
Thank you Vijay..Happy New Year!
Date: 1/1/2019 7:17:00 AM
This is just what Luloo will love, Joseph:) have a wonderful and a blessed New Year:)
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 8:09:00 AM
Thank you Jo...Have a Happy and blessed New Year!..
Date: 1/1/2019 7:01:00 AM
Full of sadness this one Joseph, especially that last stanza.. Have a great 201..
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 8:08:00 AM
Thank you Silent One..Happy New Year..
Date: 1/1/2019 2:13:00 AM
am not sure how one explains this, but some poets I just like their style of writing, even they write in many different forms, you are one of them! Happy New years!
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Joseph May
Date: 1/1/2019 6:43:00 AM
Thank you Arthur, Happy New Year!

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