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The Departure

- The Departure-
Tinder leafy twirl
 Paper origami girl 
Vortex cyclonic swish
Her lift  a black Subaru
Such kisses blown departing wave
Mistook my greeting for a  grave
Leaves and kisses
Lie now remaining still
On our dreamt up driveway
Stony statue petrified
Concrete gargoyles kept inside
Love embalmed and mummified
Chaste behind that leaving car
Leftover stares at looking through rooms
Rancid wine repeats - its done
Mistakes were made and multiplied
Muted violin without a bow
And love goes on
And life goes gone

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 6/1/2017 10:37:00 AM
if she mistook your greeting for a grave, what kind of "... love goes on" is that? stirring, striking, boggles and balms. I think I'm a fan. Much love.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/4/2018 3:20:00 PM
Cmon Robert. Have you ever been in love? It doesnt just stop. Much love back to you. Thank you
Date: 11/18/2016 8:16:00 AM
This gave me chills, I'm doing catch up since I was on sabbatical for a time, but I was so enamored with your poetry, I had to revisit! Provocatively rousing. Love 'Paper origami girl' and 'Concrete gargoyles' simply effective!
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/18/2016 11:39:00 AM
Wow Paloma. I am so happy for your visit and also your kind and eloquent comments.thank you
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/18/2016 11:37:00 AM
Wow Paloma. I am so happy for your visit and also your kind and eloquent comments.thank you
Date: 11/2/2016 4:35:00 PM
Beautiful FEEL in this, Jannie, hollow, empty and final feelings - loss in all its grayness expressed ... CayCay
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/4/2016 7:33:00 AM
Thank you Cay Cay
Date: 10/27/2016 12:57:00 AM
I'm amazed by any human aspect that allows us to be anything other than "parts". Chaste leaving? So is this a verbal middle-finger?
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/27/2016 1:12:00 AM
...me thinks that you lov war..
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/27/2016 1:07:00 AM
Hi Robert, somewhere in your comments is a hidden compliment. But I know you like it cause youve read the others. He he

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