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The Departure

- The Departure- Tinder leafy twirl Paper origami girl Vortex cyclonic swish Her lift a black Subaru Such kisses blown departing wave Mistook my greeting for a grave Leaves and kisses Lie now remaining still On our dreamt up driveway Stony statue petrified Concrete gargoyles kept inside Love embalmed and mummified Chaste behind that leaving car Leftover stares at looking through rooms Rancid wine repeats - its done Mistakes were made and multiplied Muted violin without a bow And love goes on And life goes gone

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Date: 6/1/2017 10:37:00 AM
if she mistook your greeting for a grave, what kind of "... love goes on" is that? stirring, striking, boggles and balms. I think I'm a fan. Much love.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/4/2018 3:20:00 PM
Cmon Robert. Have you ever been in love? It doesnt just stop. Much love back to you. Thank you
Date: 11/18/2016 8:16:00 AM
This gave me chills, I'm doing catch up since I was on sabbatical for a time, but I was so enamored with your poetry, I had to revisit! Provocatively rousing. Love 'Paper origami girl' and 'Concrete gargoyles' simply effective!
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/18/2016 11:39:00 AM
Wow Paloma. I am so happy for your visit and also your kind and eloquent comments.thank you
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/18/2016 11:37:00 AM
Wow Paloma. I am so happy for your visit and also your kind and eloquent comments.thank you
Date: 11/2/2016 4:35:00 PM
Beautiful FEEL in this, Jannie, hollow, empty and final feelings - loss in all its grayness expressed ... CayCay
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/4/2016 7:33:00 AM
Thank you Cay Cay
Date: 10/27/2016 12:57:00 AM
I'm amazed by any human aspect that allows us to be anything other than "parts". Chaste leaving? So is this a verbal middle-finger?
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/27/2016 1:12:00 AM
...me thinks that you lov war..
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 10/27/2016 1:07:00 AM
Hi Robert, somewhere in your comments is a hidden compliment. But I know you like it cause youve read the others. He he

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