The Death of Me

Water’s been the death of me.
The horse troth which provides a hiding space 
during the Indian incursion,
but too long down, with no up,
arrows flying ...
hair floating like Ophelia
on the river.

Water’s been the death of me
like gulped like air, a walking companion
 of waking dream.
Jane’s moors 
and the suckling swamp 
of morose memories;
a Victorian I,  asleep not,
 be ... on the bottom of the moor.

Water laughs its skeletal teeth seep drool
as fear abides, as I did whooshing 
beneath and between, the betweens ...
with molten memories in my mind's eye
of heart pumping, scream raising, terror
and yet I know, though I live now ...

water will be the death of me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Moribund Avatar
November 9, 2009 at 12:53 PM
Dear Deborah: This poem really hit home. When I was 11 I almost drowned. This is a great poem and the wording is very artistic. GREAT job. Yours truly: Sheol
Van De Casteele Avatar
October 12, 2009 at 4:51 AM
this is gorgeous; i love the imagery :D very gothic and haunting. i also wanted to say thanks for your lovely compliments about my poems and for your advice. take care and keep writing beautiful poetry - Amy
Jackson Avatar
September 24, 2009 at 1:40 PM
I am sorry about that i never knew that's what it's meant. i understand your poem
Jackson Avatar
September 22, 2009 at 11:24 AM
DO U REALLY THINK THAT THIS IS THE WAY UR GOING TO DIE? I LOVE IT ANY WAY
Guzzi Avatar
August 14, 2009 at 2:02 PM
Past life memories..shiver.
Kendrick Avatar
August 11, 2009 at 12:16 PM
Interesting. Sara My poem The Great King was about King David and Bathsheba. The King was married but not to her. She was married but not to him. He sent for her and they had sex then he sent her back home. She sent word that she was pregnant. The king sent for her husband to come off the battle field so he could spent the night with his wife but he would not. The king then had him killed and took Bathsheba as his wife. The child she carried died. Loosely told. Sara
Mcmorrow Avatar
August 10, 2009 at 7:57 PM
Thank you on your comment. I am not exactly sure if supernova is a compliment, but i appreciate the comment. This piece however, is an awesome write, and i am glad i read it.
Dvorkis Avatar
August 9, 2009 at 9:39 PM
you could always test if she's a witch if she drowned instead of floated, but then she's dead so there's not much left of her innocence since there's not much left of her. caught the Ophelia reference like Sara, reminds me of the painting of her by John Millais that I saw in England. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ophelia_(painting) in case you haven't seen it recently:) love your stuff Deb. You never shy away from scary things like watery graves and death. that's the way to do it, never hide.
Lokken Avatar
August 9, 2009 at 6:34 PM
Reminds me of the scene where Sylvia Plath almost drowned herself. Very cutting, even haunting...I love the allusion to Ophelia. Love, Sara:)
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