The Dawn

We all have a tendancy to fade Becoming marred in a false reflection An image that pretends though it is us who makes all of the effort An image false in its merit- Therefore meritless Slipping beyond the wonder that supercedes contentment That borders on allusion and disenfranchisement Though we want it, wanting it pure So that soon even its fantasy doesn't exist So that soon we've faded away into oblivion.

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Sean L Sanders

Date: 1/30/2013 8:58:00 AM

Very touching excellent poem written by a very good poet. I saw that you view another poet named Margherita Russo she's only 14 and I know it would mean alot for her to have you read her newest poem if you have the time. Thank you very much.

Jack Ellison

Date: 1/28/2013 8:06:00 AM

Just picking these poems out at random... haven't found one yet that hasn't impressed me! Another brilliant write, dear Bianca... huggs, Jack xox

Debra Squyres

Date: 1/15/2013 4:21:00 PM

Wisdom in these words...the reality vs the fantasy of who we are. I like the dawn as the analogy too, very fitting. I too see this as intropective. Great write !!

Curt Mongold

Date: 1/15/2013 2:53:00 PM

Intersting write my friend, introspective and yet alludes to the emotions we all share at one time or another. Thanks for sharing... Curt