The Dance of Jealousy

Written: June 03, 2024, For  Miranda Hawley

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The breeze rippling through your locks breaks my heart
Missing them, I clasp my hands at my side
I saw streams streak off your neck and apart
I should sustain your side and grant my snide
You catch my eye and dance as we used to
I know you'll dance lost at a spiteful dance
You twirl while on fire; no one can spot you
You dance to relieve pain; your soul askance

My chest niggles from your intense envy
I wish to hear your rage and ease my pain
To deem you as plague, this soul might levy
I can't hold this within; tears are a strain
          
          What I hear is triggering mental fears
          My heart hates distrust as you dance with tears

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thriveni c mysore

July 9, 2024 at 4:36 AM

Oh! intense poetry, congratulations dear poet. Happy writing.

Sara Kendrick

July 8, 2024 at 1:48 PM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Delighted to see your poem on the winners' list. Sara K

Tonye George

June 8, 2024 at 8:50 AM

Lovely written Dear Sotto. What is love with beats of wants and jealousy sprinkled on it? "I wish to hear your rage and ease my pain To deem you as plague, this soul might levy." I love it when emotions fluctuate, from the dark part to the sweet parts and then the toxic ones. A Mix of everything that makes it whole. All in equal quantities though. But then again, what is love without Pain.

Duke Beaufort

June 4, 2024 at 6:18 AM

SP, you picked a great tango to go with this sonnet. It has a softness during the second part. The emotion of jealousy you write about does sting. "What I hear is triggering mental fears" is spot on from a psychological point of view. Since these are emotions that inform us of something amiss in our thinking, I hope these people get some therapy!

Victor Buhagiar

June 4, 2024 at 2:08 AM

A lovely sonnet full of emotions. Great sonnet. Best for a win.

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 3, 2024 at 12:50 PM

- "You dance to relieve pain; your soul askance" ... a way to hide one's feelings ... feelings can be difficult, Las :) - A deeply meaningful poem :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs