The Dance of Jealousy

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Written: June 03, 2024, For Miranda Hawley ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The breeze rippling through your locks breaks my heart Missing them, I clasp my hands at my side I saw streams streak off your neck and apart I should sustain your side and grant my snide You catch my eye and dance as we used to I know you'll dance lost at a spiteful dance You twirl while on fire; no one can spot you You dance to relieve pain; your soul askance My chest niggles from your intense envy I wish to hear your rage and ease my pain To deem you as plague, this soul might levy I can't hold this within; tears are a strain What I hear is triggering mental fears My heart hates distrust as you dance with tears

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thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/9/2024 4:36:00 AM

Oh! intense poetry, congratulations dear poet. Happy writing.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/8/2024 1:48:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Delighted to see your poem on the winners' list. Sara K

Tonye George

Date: 6/8/2024 8:50:00 AM

Lovely written Dear Sotto. What is love with beats of wants and jealousy sprinkled on it? "I wish to hear your rage and ease my pain To deem you as plague, this soul might levy." I love it when emotions fluctuate, from the dark part to the sweet parts and then the toxic ones. A Mix of everything that makes it whole. All in equal quantities though. But then again, what is love without Pain.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 6/4/2024 6:18:00 AM

SP, you picked a great tango to go with this sonnet. It has a softness during the second part. The emotion of jealousy you write about does sting. "What I hear is triggering mental fears" is spot on from a psychological point of view. Since these are emotions that inform us of something amiss in our thinking, I hope these people get some therapy!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/4/2024 2:08:00 AM

A lovely sonnet full of emotions. Great sonnet. Best for a win.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/3/2024 12:50:00 PM

- "You dance to relieve pain; your soul askance" ... a way to hide one's feelings ... feelings can be difficult, Las :) - A deeply meaningful poem :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Jay Narain

Date: 6/3/2024 11:10:00 AM

Nice poem. GL in contest