The Curtain of Pain Fell Upon Us

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While snowflakes continue to fall,
upon a night  pale as ghostly winter
I falter from my own distraught pause--
the hazy  moon watches my young girl
a serene angel laying in starshine, on a bed
frigid   cold   with her  tiny body 
wrapped in  fine linen and pink bonnet: 
I could still recall her pupils tightening, 
while through glimpses silent, my own mouth
utters, ' fight, my dear one, fight!'

Yet, her last gasp escapes a frozen outline,
those eyes blinking restlessly up high
as my fallen gazes droop at her gaunt form --
How this heart cleaves till screams rack
my own body with convulsive, inconsolable
anguish: this route to a thievish doom
makes me seethe, slam,  screech at life
for my child's unborn dreams ...never to fly, ever.
It rains and a mantle of tears drown
upon her skin,   my face  in endless whys--
as I howl with night birds for the villainy of time.



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04.26.2019

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Date: 5/2/2019 3:51:00 PM
This write towers above all others in emotion and complexity - enough said.
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Date: 4/30/2019 9:14:00 AM
Such beautiful poetry nette...Congrats! on your fabulous win...happy endings...^WW^
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Date: 4/30/2019 9:12:00 AM
so beautiful sweet lady, I loved every word. Congratulations and thank you for your participation in my contest. :) -luloo
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Date: 4/26/2019 5:19:00 PM
Truly sad, painful; well penned with a great deal of obvious emotion. I hope it does well in the contest, best of luck.
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Date: 4/26/2019 4:17:00 PM
It is difficult to put into words the kind of grief losing a child can cause. The depth of pain you express in this poignant poem is beautifully expressed Nette. This emotive piece is going into my faves. xxoo
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Date: 4/26/2019 4:16:00 PM
Dear net: This metaphoric prose blew me away with all its passion and poignancy. I certainly hope you get a well deserved big placement! please accept an Italian hug...Ralph
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Date: 4/26/2019 8:29:00 AM
A sad lovely poem. A time is quickly come when death will die. Great work Bette.
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Date: 4/25/2019 4:50:00 PM
A heart that lives the pain fills their words with depth of feel and power of endurance.. so that such an aching beauty be rendered to an avid reader! A different feel and ink worthy of fave and win, dear Nette.. warmest wishes.. Love and hugs.
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Date: 4/25/2019 4:45:00 PM
Through poetry the anguish of grief. Sorry for your loss. The tears and screams mixed with a hollow why.
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Date: 4/25/2019 4:35:00 PM
A heartfelt write, Nette..it tugs the heart..and reminds us all how some things in life have everlasting impact. An excellent write.. a winning entry for the contest.
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Date: 4/25/2019 4:23:00 PM
A very powerful emotional verse nette and you hear of this happening, I couldn't for a moment understand the pain that some people go through. Tom.
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Date: 4/25/2019 4:21:00 PM
Your words are like arrows going straight for the heart. Only a mother can understand such anguish at losing a life of her own. Winning wishes dear Nette and here is a Hug
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