The County Line Motel

We met up once a month at the County Line Motel
For a night of pure, unadulterated ecstasy.
Left our mundane lives behind, out by the county line;
Nothing fancy but a lot of privacy.

I know you’ll understand, how much I felt like a man
With this beautiful woman wrapped in my arms.
We made love through the night, leaving before the morning light,
With both our phones set to work as alarms.

But then came that day, near the end of the month of May
When she didn’t show up at the allotted time;
I laid alone in the bed, when the anchorman said,
“Our top story is about a suicide-murder crime.”

I nearly let out a scream, when I saw the pictures on the screen
And realized I’d never hold her again.
She wasn’t just another in a long line of lovers;
She was my soul mate and had become my friend.

And still once a month I go to the County Line Motel
For a peaceful night of sad remembrance.
Remembering the girl who once rocked my world
And was for me a lover’s deliverance.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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K. Avatar
September 25, 2010 at 12:23 PM
oh wow-- what a heartbreaking take you have here Joe-- but so wonderful that it won! Congrats! --nikko :)
Dietrich Avatar
September 24, 2010 at 9:17 PM
gosh, joe, I hope this isn't true. What a tale!! congratulations on your win. LUv, Andrea
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 24, 2010 at 12:02 PM
Wow Joe, this sounds so real, like a true story. Exellent poem and deserves the honor of being in the winner's circle. So glad I didn't miss reading this one. Congratulations! Love, Connie
Brown Avatar
September 24, 2010 at 7:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Joe in Paula Swanson's contest "Line". Love, Carol
Bagnall Avatar
September 24, 2010 at 4:41 AM
Oh scary, interesting with a painful twist, this competition has been really diverse. Enjoyed the read & congrats
Devonshire Avatar
September 24, 2010 at 4:34 AM
Very happy to see this one in the winners' circle, Joe. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn (Enjoyed seeing photos of your beautiful family on Facebook. Thanks for the invite.)
Gorelick Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 9:45 PM
JOe, congrats..this is so different..sad butbeautigully told. BG
Roberts Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 9:28 PM
I thought it was fantastic the first time I read it, congrats on your win with this great entry
Mannan Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 9:00 PM
An absolutely sad and touching piece. I loved it. Many congratulations on your win.
Sweetheart Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 6:00 PM
Congrats Joe on your win in the Line contest.. another great write and win to enjoy with luv my friend...
Mehta Avatar
September 23, 2010 at 4:04 PM
Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest, Joe
Gorelick Avatar
September 21, 2010 at 4:00 PM
Joe, this one rocks..I can just hear this one..If Johnny Cash was around hed be the one to sing it...BG
Keys Avatar
September 21, 2010 at 11:09 AM
a magnificent work, thank you, chuck
Roberts Avatar
September 21, 2010 at 10:52 AM
wow, really well done Joe, if its for the "Blink " or the "Line" contest , good luck
Devonshire Avatar
September 21, 2010 at 10:49 AM
What an incredible story behind this poem, Joe. It gave me chills! And Carrie is right -- this could be a set of lyrics for a country/western hit! If this is for the "line" contest, you took a very clever approach that reaches out and grabs the reader's heart. Love, Carolyn
Richards Avatar
September 21, 2010 at 8:32 AM
Wow....this could be the lyrics to a Country Western Song.... it has all the tragic elements. A great entry for the line contest, Joe! ~
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