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The County Line Motel

We met up once a month at the County Line Motel For a night of pure, unadulterated ecstasy. Left our mundane lives behind, out by the county line; Nothing fancy but a lot of privacy. I know you’ll understand, how much I felt like a man With this beautiful woman wrapped in my arms. We made love through the night, leaving before the morning light, With both our phones set to work as alarms. But then came that day, near the end of the month of May When she didn’t show up at the allotted time; I laid alone in the bed, when the anchorman said, “Our top story is about a suicide-murder crime.” I nearly let out a scream, when I saw the pictures on the screen And realized I’d never hold her again. She wasn’t just another in a long line of lovers; She was my soul mate and had become my friend. And still once a month I go to the County Line Motel For a peaceful night of sad remembrance. Remembering the girl who once rocked my world And was for me a lover’s deliverance.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 9/25/2010 12:23:00 PM
oh wow-- what a heartbreaking take you have here Joe-- but so wonderful that it won! Congrats! --nikko :)
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Date: 9/24/2010 9:17:00 PM
gosh, joe, I hope this isn't true. What a tale!! congratulations on your win. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 9/24/2010 12:02:00 PM
Wow Joe, this sounds so real, like a true story. Exellent poem and deserves the honor of being in the winner's circle. So glad I didn't miss reading this one. Congratulations! Love, Connie
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Date: 9/24/2010 7:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Joe in Paula Swanson's contest "Line". Love, Carol
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Date: 9/24/2010 4:41:00 AM
Oh scary, interesting with a painful twist, this competition has been really diverse. Enjoyed the read & congrats
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Date: 9/24/2010 4:34:00 AM
Very happy to see this one in the winners' circle, Joe. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn (Enjoyed seeing photos of your beautiful family on Facebook. Thanks for the invite.)
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Date: 9/23/2010 9:45:00 PM
JOe, congrats..this is so different..sad butbeautigully told. BG
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Date: 9/23/2010 9:28:00 PM
I thought it was fantastic the first time I read it, congrats on your win with this great entry
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Date: 9/23/2010 9:00:00 PM
An absolutely sad and touching piece. I loved it. Many congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/23/2010 6:00:00 PM
Congrats Joe on your win in the Line contest.. another great write and win to enjoy with luv my friend...
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Date: 9/23/2010 4:04:00 PM
Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest, Joe
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Date: 9/21/2010 4:00:00 PM
Joe, this one rocks..I can just hear this one..If Johnny Cash was around hed be the one to sing it...BG
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Date: 9/21/2010 11:09:00 AM
a magnificent work, thank you, chuck
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Date: 9/21/2010 10:52:00 AM
wow, really well done Joe, if its for the "Blink " or the "Line" contest , good luck
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Date: 9/21/2010 10:49:00 AM
What an incredible story behind this poem, Joe. It gave me chills! And Carrie is right -- this could be a set of lyrics for a country/western hit! If this is for the "line" contest, you took a very clever approach that reaches out and grabs the reader's heart. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/21/2010 8:32:00 AM
Wow....this could be the lyrics to a Country Western Song.... it has all the tragic elements. A great entry for the line contest, Joe! ~
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