The Controversy

So there he was!
In a painless crib, he lay
On the other side lay his counterpart
Normality of the evening star was on them.

He on the left cracked his ribs
He knew he had to touch
A sense of curiosity drove them away
In a little while fires were on them

In their fearless madness they left the world
On their own they dwelled!
In a moment, a pinnacle of pleasure was born.

Even in their fears, no tears, they locked
To them it was an experience
Desires driven and pranks on the rise

This time on their own
In amidst of the climax, a skyscraper arose  
He was on top!

Every inch proved to be wrathful
Neither remorse nor guilt reigned
It was meant to be!
They had to make it happen!

An abyss swallowed them
Neither a word nor a touch
Just a brilliant self on the other self!

As the sun rose, all were furbished
The memories of the night were on them

Taunted by the transformation, they fell!
Desires became vanity
           AND
In a final dramatic spell, they bid each good bye.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 3/10/2015 10:33:00 PM
Intriguing write, Samuel. I read a sense of this heightened sense of reality rejecting the outside world, the selfishness of the self and its perceptions. Whatever induced the euphoria is up for debate, but that is secondary to the self (ego). The stimulant does not matter, it is the self that sweeps itself away.
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Samuel Enrique
Date: 3/19/2015 6:59:00 AM
Thanks alot, i appreciate your feedback
Date: 3/10/2015 8:39:00 AM
Cool,thank you
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Date: 3/10/2015 1:40:00 AM
I love the beginning . But help me if am wrong, is this about colonization and discrimination?
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Date: 3/10/2015 7:03:00 AM
thanks Hunjeri. Uhm! you are not badly off, this poem is all about an allusive state of mind, there is a discriminatory atmosphere outside the body which the mind is trying to fight off!
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