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The Cold Embrace Of Death

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Sepulchered inside a vaulted night so deep the crow soars alone inside that ebon sky of yours Center arched in space, heaven is filled with stars an so your secret lies across orange-yellow meteors. Encased inside a cold embrace, your imminent last sigh ! . Irreversible as the hour, this cancer has taken a leap and the butterflies of summer, have all but gone away Choral hymns of worship, " Amazing Grace," Foresight ! how I long to keep you here, at least for one more day. Within the cold embrace of death, your inevitable, goodbye !

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Lin Lane

Date: 4/18/2025 11:25:00 AM

Hi Vie, and congratulations on your poem's winning spot in Sara's contest. The cold hands of death are foreshadowed with your mention of crows and ebon skies. Wonderful dark imagery..

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/18/2025 9:46:00 AM

Dear Rose, your poem is so powerfully yet tenderly poignant. I was especially struck by "Irreversible as the hour" - a chilling verse! Your deep, dark imagery is sadly and achingly beautiful. Indeed, cancer brings one to the cold embrace of death far too soon. Congratulations for your success in Sara's contest. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Sara Jama

Date: 4/16/2025 6:44:00 AM

Congratulations on placing in my contest. I enjoyed the word choices you choose in your write. From "Sepulchered inside a vaulted night so deep", to the "butterflies of summer, have all but gone away." Cancer has a eternal impact. Thank you for writing.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/16/2025 10:41:00 AM

I really enjoyed the contest Sara, thank you for running it. Its always hard for me to write about death and disease, so you made me stretch myself, and I appreciate that. thank you

Terry Miller

Date: 4/16/2025 4:59:00 AM

this is wonderful and touching, congratulations

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/16/2025 10:40:00 AM

Thankyou for leaving a comment dear Terry, :)

Yann Rolland

Date: 4/15/2025 7:52:00 AM

we have to endure terrible things, your poem is so close to reality, some lives are unfair, we need empathy and poetry, everyone, thanks poet

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/16/2025 10:40:00 AM

We definitely need empathy dear Yann, or the world will feel so cold . thanks for your comment stay well !

Ink Empress

Date: 4/14/2025 12:04:00 PM

Dear rose, This is such an evocative and soul stirring take on the prompt! I feel the aching emotions flowing throughout and how you wish for one last moment, as youv mentioned here, its so sad how so many leave due to cancer and many more other reasons. I love your opening lines here as well as how youv written “ an so your secret lies across orange-yellow meteors. Encased inside a cold embrace, your imminent last sigh !” Touching and mystical! And moving! Congratulations on your placement in saras contest! Pleasure reading your poem! A fave this is for me! Sending you light always

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/16/2025 10:40:00 AM

You are always so encouraging you give me wings, when I want to fly, (and I always want to fly ) have a positive day, filled with God's love.

Jay Narain

Date: 4/14/2025 10:41:00 AM

Nice poem.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/16/2025 10:39:00 AM

Thank you Jay for commenting :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/14/2025 1:21:00 AM

Death is man's punishment for sinning. It can never be pleasant. So we strive to be on the right side.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 4/16/2025 10:38:00 AM

we try Victor, but Cancer is a stealer that robs so many of us, thanks for the comment, Keep well