David Mohn Poet Choka

The Clench of Fall

cauldroned lakes of steam
wafting up in fevered plumes
labored breath as life exhales
venomed arctic gales
plunder trees on sun starved days
brittle claws of tumbled leaves

17 Sep 2014
Choka Me - Poetry Contest
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Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2014 at 9:35 PM So glad to see this one on the winners' list. BIG congrats to you.

Faye Gibson September 27, 2014 at 2:14 PM I really enjoyed fading this piece, David. I love the progression of fall. Congrats.

Maurice Yvonne September 27, 2014 at 8:40 AM What a stunning piece. Congratulations on your win.

Paul Callus September 27, 2014 at 6:40 AM This is very expressive, David. The 'clench' in the title transmits what follows throughout your impressive choka. Congrats on a merited win. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta September 27, 2014 at 5:37 AM Thanks for the entry and support. Congrats on the win, david

Kelly Deschler September 26, 2014 at 1:55 AM The cool night winds, the claw-like leaves, and those foggy days do seem to grasp us every autumn season.... I loved the detailed imagery in these few short lines. Wonderful writing, David! Good luck in the contest!

Andrea Dietrich September 18, 2014 at 9:33 PM a very descriptive choka, David. Good luck in the contest.

Nette Onclaud September 18, 2014 at 12:50 PM your work is full of energy, of disaster.. I really enjoyed it, david.. it really leaves you hanging. ... huggs