The Cave

The cave underground Chamber of darkness musk damp Secure place__bat's home Cave inside fireglow Outward facing light Aspens Golden yellow hair Cave fear slow echo Hollow blank lonely scarey Empty dreams no hope

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Duncan Chappell

Date: 10/29/2010 2:06:00 AM

wonderful use of words here Sara thank you duncan

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 10/8/2010 3:40:00 AM

Congrats on your win with this very interesting haiku series, Sara :) I hope you are having a good week...nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/5/2010 8:33:00 PM

Congratulations, Sara. I remember how much I liked the golden yellow hair of the Aspens.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/5/2010 3:03:00 PM

Congrats Sara on your win in the Haiku contest with this awesome piece.. enjoy your win and keep focused on receiving your blessing as your son heals and your pain goes away..luv.. commented on your blog too..

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/5/2010 12:48:00 PM

Sara, Congratulations and thanks for supporting my contest. I had lots of fun running this contest,.p.d.

Francine Roberts

Date: 10/5/2010 12:44:00 PM

wonderful entry Sara, congrats on your win in the contest

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/5/2010 12:20:00 PM

Congratulations Sara on your win in P.D.'s contest *Going Haiku Crazy*. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/5/2010 12:20:00 PM

Congratulations on this well deserved win, Sara

Audrey Haick

Date: 10/2/2010 5:49:00 PM

"Empty dreams no hope" sad and frightening, Sara. Nevertheless, insightful and deep. Peace, love, Audrey

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/2/2010 3:00:00 PM

Caves are a fine subject for poetry as you show here. Today's troglodytes are living the same way our ancestors did. Keep 'em coming Yours Matthew Anish

William Kershaw

Date: 10/2/2010 2:45:00 PM

Sara, Wonderful as always. Scary too! Any place of no hope makes me afraid. Very afraid. Thank you so much for your kind words on my stuff. Love, Will

John Freeman

Date: 10/2/2010 12:17:00 PM

I enjoyed your triple Haiku Sara. Excellent idea for presentation. Agape, Moses

Wilma Neels

Date: 10/2/2010 9:57:00 AM

So many hidden messages in your haiku Sara, thoroughly enjoyed as well. Enjoy your weekend, love Wilma

Gert W. Knop

Date: 10/1/2010 4:15:00 PM

When we were kids we used to play in a bunker close to a river. This was quite dangerous as there were still ammunition and handgranates covered by water as relicts of the last war. But it was also filled with life from the bats! Enjoyed the read!...Gert

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/1/2010 12:31:00 PM

Quite visual for sure Sara.. I remember seeing a movie years ago called Nighwing all about bats and treasure and spooky stuff so.. this reminded me .. chamber of darkness ..musk damp..bats..luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2010 10:55:00 AM

I really like that image of the golden yellow hair in the middle haiku, Sara. The rest is very eery. Like writing for Halloween! LUv,Andrea

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 10/1/2010 10:16:00 AM

hey mom!! good work today! Have you been in a bat cave?? I haven't had a customer today...yuck!

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 10/1/2010 10:15:00 AM

Cool images you have once again brougt the reader...love it!!! luv Michael

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/1/2010 9:34:00 AM

Enjoyable haikuson the the theme of cave, Sara