The Cave

The cave underground
Chamber of darkness musk damp
Secure place__bat's home

Cave inside fireglow
Outward facing light Aspens
Golden yellow hair

Cave fear slow echo
Hollow blank lonely scarey
Empty dreams no hope

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Duncan Chappell

October 29, 2010 at 2:06 AM

wonderful use of words here Sara thank you duncan

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

October 8, 2010 at 3:40 AM

Congrats on your win with this very interesting haiku series, Sara :) I hope you are having a good week...nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich

October 5, 2010 at 8:33 PM

Congratulations, Sara. I remember how much I liked the golden yellow hair of the Aspens.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

October 5, 2010 at 3:03 PM

Congrats Sara on your win in the Haiku contest with this awesome piece.. enjoy your win and keep focused on receiving your blessing as your son heals and your pain goes away..luv.. commented on your blog too..

Poet Destroyer A

October 5, 2010 at 12:48 PM

Sara, Congratulations and thanks for supporting my contest. I had lots of fun running this contest,.p.d.

Francine Roberts

October 5, 2010 at 12:44 PM

wonderful entry Sara, congrats on your win in the contest

Carol Sunshine Brown

October 5, 2010 at 12:20 PM

Congratulations Sara on your win in P.D.'s contest *Going Haiku Crazy*. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

October 5, 2010 at 12:20 PM

Congratulations on this well deserved win, Sara

Audrey Haick

October 2, 2010 at 5:49 PM

"Empty dreams no hope" sad and frightening, Sara. Nevertheless, insightful and deep. Peace, love, Audrey

Matthew Anish

October 2, 2010 at 3:00 PM

Caves are a fine subject for poetry as you show here. Today's troglodytes are living the same way our ancestors did. Keep 'em coming Yours Matthew Anish

William Kershaw

October 2, 2010 at 2:45 PM

Sara, Wonderful as always. Scary too! Any place of no hope makes me afraid. Very afraid. Thank you so much for your kind words on my stuff. Love, Will

John Freeman

October 2, 2010 at 12:17 PM

I enjoyed your triple Haiku Sara. Excellent idea for presentation. Agape, Moses

Wilma Neels

October 2, 2010 at 9:57 AM

So many hidden messages in your haiku Sara, thoroughly enjoyed as well. Enjoy your weekend, love Wilma

Gert W. Knop

October 1, 2010 at 4:15 PM

When we were kids we used to play in a bunker close to a river. This was quite dangerous as there were still ammunition and handgranates covered by water as relicts of the last war. But it was also filled with life from the bats! Enjoyed the read!...Gert

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

October 1, 2010 at 12:31 PM

Quite visual for sure Sara.. I remember seeing a movie years ago called Nighwing all about bats and treasure and spooky stuff so.. this reminded me .. chamber of darkness ..musk damp..bats..luv..