The Bus

Rumble rumble chuga chuga boom
We sit on the bus as it struggles through the gloom

Mumble grumble hear the voices say
"What an awful journey I've stood up all the way"

"Could you would you move aside a little
Your elbows in my ribcage and it's feeling rather brittle"

Jingle jangle rings a mobile phone
Not another one they think and what a silly tone

Crinkle crackle goes a magazine
They thumb the pages idly and don't know what they've seen

Scribble scrabble goes my pencil lead
As the noises on the bus, make music in my head








Contest : first poem on the soup (( second poem 4 some )) 
8th Place

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 6/3/2011 7:48:00 PM
That's one annoying bus ride. Good way to complain about modern society. Especially with the lines about the cell phones. Congrats on your cool poem's win.
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Date: 6/3/2011 3:27:00 PM
Congratulations on the win to you in the contest of p.d., Nick
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Date: 6/3/2011 11:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Poet Destroyer's contest Nick. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/3/2011 9:38:00 AM
Congrats Nick on another super win for another super poem luv.. enjoy ..happy weekend..too..
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Date: 6/3/2011 7:18:00 AM
congrats on your excellent entry into the contest Luv*Skat
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Date: 2/10/2010 8:31:00 PM
Congrats Nick on your featured poem on Soup this week.. an amazing write.. luv.. Linda-Marie "Sweetheart" of P.S.
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Date: 2/10/2010 12:00:00 PM
Nick, Congratulations on your worthy feature this week. Sincerely, Moses
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Date: 2/8/2010 5:08:00 PM
Wonderful writing here, Nick!! I think cell phones are the rudest thing that was ever invented ... LOL ... especially when you get a dozen people on a bus all talking at the same time ... smile ... this is a wonderful selection to be featured this week here at the Soup!! Congratulations!!
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Date: 2/8/2010 2:29:00 PM
enjoyed reading today, keep sharing, congrats on the featured poem,
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Date: 2/8/2010 10:52:00 AM
Congratulations on being featured on the home page this week with your poetry >> James
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Date: 2/8/2010 9:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week. May you have many more Nick. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/8/2010 5:51:00 AM
Many congrats on your featured piece. Rgds Janette
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Date: 1/28/2010 2:08:00 PM
yup those buses are quite interesting..I have one about a bus in Nepal..yup..It's couplet form. Light & love
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Date: 1/15/2010 5:52:00 AM
you really do have a head for poetry,read some of mine,i like the way you write about real things its great,best wishes to you,ken
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Date: 1/14/2010 6:12:00 AM
I have enjoyed reading your excellent poetry today Nick. May you have a wonderful day filled with inspiration. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/14/2010 5:21:00 AM
Nice write, Great use of alliteration.Thanks for your comments. Welcome to Poetry Soup!
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