The Breaking Point

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i didn’t see it coming for days walking in a daze a fog that wasn’t lifting obviously in shock one foot in front of the other on automatic pilot not knowing what was next then it happened his ashes were ready to be picked up triggering a flood of tears there was no turning back no delusion of him just having stepped out he was coming home in a box he was coming home home to stay AP: 1st place 2022 Submitted on November 29, 2020 for contest UN-RHY-ME sponsored by BRIAN STRAND - RANKED 1ST Originally posted on November 25, 2020

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Meru Groen

Date: 12/7/2020 8:46:00 AM

He... is the Gentle Healer. Meru

Line Gauthier
Date: 12/7/2020 5:34:00 PM

Thank you, Meru ~

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/2/2020 2:24:00 PM

Line, your poignant pen reflects your mourning, yearning and the coming-to-terms with emotions of loss that is still so new. So very moving, so very sadly beautiful. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Brian’s contest.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier
Date: 12/2/2020 8:10:00 PM

Thank you so much, Susan. What a lovely thing to say ~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/2/2020 2:03:00 PM

SO emotive but done with such skill. Love this, Line. Congrats, and a fave.

Line Gauthier
Date: 12/2/2020 8:11:00 PM

Thanks for the much appreciated comment, Andrea ~

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/2/2020 8:50:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A "Beautiful" write. Many years ago, I picked up the box on Dec 24 (a loved one). I know how you must be feeling/hurting. I am so very sorry. Blessings be on you with Hugs.......

Line Gauthier
Date: 12/2/2020 8:11:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paula. Most appreciated ~

John Watt

Date: 12/1/2020 12:00:00 PM

Your words are so real, Line. That feeling when it hits home that our loved one is gone, truly gone, symbolized by the box of ashes in our hands. The melancholy image you selected is so perfect to illustrate these words. I loved the line "for days walking in a daze". I know this is still very fresh for you, and it amazes me you are able to be so lucid to write like these even as you recover from the shock of it all. You have a marvelous gift, my friend ~ John

Line Gauthier
Date: 12/1/2020 9:30:00 PM

Thanks for your most appreciated comments, John. I am touched ~