Line Gauthier Poet Free verse

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The Breaking Point

i didn’t see it coming
for days walking in a daze
a fog that wasn’t lifting
obviously in shock
one foot in front of the other
on automatic pilot
not knowing what was next 
then it happened

his ashes were ready to be picked up

triggering a flood of tears
there was no turning back
no delusion of him just having stepped out
he was coming home in a box
he was coming home
home to stay



AP: 1st place 2022

Submitted on November 29, 2020 for contest UN-RHY-ME sponsored by BRIAN STRAND  -  RANKED 1ST

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Meru Groen December 7, 2020 at 8:46 AM He... is the Gentle Healer. Meru Line Gauthier December 7, 2020 at 5:34 PM Thank you, Meru ~

Susan Ashley December 2, 2020 at 2:24 PM Line, your poignant pen reflects your mourning, yearning and the coming-to-terms with emotions of loss that is still so new. So very moving, so very sadly beautiful. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Brian’s contest.. ~Susan Line Gauthier December 2, 2020 at 8:10 PM Thank you so much, Susan. What a lovely thing to say ~

Andrea Dietrich December 2, 2020 at 2:03 PM SO emotive but done with such skill. Love this, Line. Congrats, and a fave. Line Gauthier December 2, 2020 at 8:11 PM Thanks for the much appreciated comment, Andrea ~

Paula Goldsmith December 2, 2020 at 8:50 AM Congratulations on your win. A "Beautiful" write. Many years ago, I picked up the box on Dec 24 (a loved one). I know how you must be feeling/hurting. I am so very sorry. Blessings be on you with Hugs....... Line Gauthier December 2, 2020 at 8:11 PM Thank you so much, Paula. Most appreciated ~

John Watt December 1, 2020 at 12:00 PM Your words are so real, Line. That feeling when it hits home that our loved one is gone, truly gone, symbolized by the box of ashes in our hands. The melancholy image you selected is so perfect to illustrate these words. I loved the line "for days walking in a daze". I know this is still very fresh for you, and it amazes me you are able to be so lucid to write like these even as you recover from the shock of it all. You have a marvelous gift, my friend ~ John Line Gauthier December 1, 2020 at 9:30 PM Thanks for your most appreciated comments, John. I am touched ~

Greg Gaul December 1, 2020 at 5:26 AM Very thoughtful and soulful verse. Congrats on your win. Line Gauthier December 1, 2020 at 5:59 AM Thanks, Greg. Much appreciated ~

Gary Radice December 1, 2020 at 2:31 AM Your heartfelt words say it all Line. Line Gauthier December 1, 2020 at 5:59 AM Thanks for your much appreciated visit and comment, Gary ~

Gershon Wolf November 25, 2020 at 6:04 PM You've described the feeling 'to a T.' Keep the Faith, Line. ~ Deep Healing, Gershon Line Gauthier November 25, 2020 at 6:21 PM Thank you, Gershon. Most appreciated ~

Ann Gilmour November 25, 2020 at 1:03 PM My love and thoughts are with you dearest Line. With hugs from Ann xx Line Gauthier November 25, 2020 at 6:21 PM Thank you so much, Ann.