The Blue Walls

Painted in blue reminds me of the blues,
maybe I was undercooked got them a reason to overlook,
my talents wasted my energy drained in proving myself over again,
but all went in vain,
when you didn't turn back rather turned your back,
on me, you couldn't hide your glee,
happy like a bird set free,
me being a fool waited for ya,
the sweet salt got me baited for ya,
evasive my tone pervaded with gloom,
on seeing the walls painted in blue reminds me of the blues.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Radice Avatar
November 30, 2021 at 2:11 AM
I took a trip across to view your work after your kind comments on a poem of mine - and I'm so glad I did. This is a strong first poem written in a style that lays your feelings out on the line for all to see and read. I like the device as it provides a good narrative and helps the reader understand the poet's emotions. Just my thoughts. :) Cheers - Gary
Radice Avatar
November 30, 2021 at 10:54 AM
Hi Ultimate. Yours was a pleasure to read. I'm a little confused as to the 'harsh criticisms' you refer to here though. I havent recognized any of your comments being harsh at all. Keep on doing what you do. Cheers - Gary
Spectator Avatar
November 30, 2021 at 9:18 AM
Thank you Gary, it feels pretty nice coming from someone of your calibre, so happy you liked my poem, this really made my day. And sincere apologies Gary, some of my harsh criticisms were unwarranted but I was mesmerized and humbled by your response, a great learning for me. Warm regards.
Spilchuk Avatar
September 21, 2021 at 8:27 AM
Nicely done, welcome to Poetry Soup.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
September 16, 2021 at 5:38 AM
I like the deep hues in this, great write.
Spectator Avatar
September 17, 2021 at 6:08 AM
Thanks buddy, means a lot to me.
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace