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The Bitter End

I'm very sure you won't think twice of me, Before you take your flight and quickly flee. I have loved you with all my aching heart So sad to feel your wrath before we part. You took your time to load your frappin' truck Cared not a whit you ran us all amuck. I thought you might consider coming back I was once more way off the beaten track. I gave my best to make our marriage work But you behaved so much the crazy jerk. Goodbye and good riddance I'll only say Perhaps I'll try again some other day. Please don't look back and think I'll still be here I've shut the door and locked it tight, my dear. SECOND PLACE WINNER Written 4/23/2021 For "Rhyming Couplets" Contest Sponsored by Janice Cannerdy

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Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 6/1/2021 7:44:00 PM

sometimes this is how it works...thanks for the chuckles. and congrats on your win.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/1/2021 8:06:00 PM

Indeed, that is true. Thanks for your read, Jeanne. I appreciated your visit.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/30/2021 8:48:00 PM

I guess I couldn't get that slammed door open the first time around on your winner in the contest, Milt. Congrats to you. Smiles, gw

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/30/2021 9:07:00 PM

Thanks, Gershon, for your kind comment. Seems so long since I wrote this, I had to go back and see what it said. Yep, the door is still closed on that one!!!

Eve Roper

Date: 5/27/2021 9:20:00 PM

Interesting write, Milton, slap her hind off. congratulations in Janice Canerdy's couplets contest.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/27/2021 10:03:00 PM

Thanks for the read and your comment, Eve. I appreciated it.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 5/26/2021 7:58:00 PM

What a wry, tongue in cheek look at the end of a relationship, I like the touch of wistfulness in the line 'perhaps I'll try again some other day' - congrats on your win in the contest!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/26/2021 8:21:00 PM

Thank you so much, Michelle, for the read and the comments. I'm glad you liked it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/26/2021 11:14:00 AM

There is humor in the pain of your well written, well designed, lines LM! This just flows with emotion. Congratulations on your win!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/26/2021 11:31:00 AM

Thanks so much for your thoughtful comment, Sam.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/25/2021 10:36:00 PM

A big CONGRATS on your win in my contest, Milton. Thanks for entering! Janice

L Milton Hankins
Date: 5/26/2021 9:05:00 AM

Thanks, Janice. I enjoyed your contest.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/26/2021 1:36:00 PM

This is one of the most humorous sonnets I have ever read.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 4/26/2021 1:45:00 PM

Funny...I didn't think of it as a sonnet.

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/24/2021 8:39:00 AM

Hi L. Milton, I enjoyed your humourous completes. I found it to be such an entertaining write. Good to know it isn't true. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis

L Milton Hankins
Date: 4/24/2021 9:42:00 AM

Thanks, Alexis. Nope, I never had such an experience. Funny how a tragedy like this could be comical.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/23/2021 9:25:00 PM

Good luck in the contest. You are bound to do well with such a marvelous entry. :)

L Milton Hankins
Date: 4/23/2021 9:38:00 PM

Well, I hope so, but you never know. Thanks, Evelyn.

Daniel Turner

Date: 4/23/2021 4:12:00 PM

Was it really love or a facsimile thereof? Sadly, everything changes, even people's feelings. Good luck, Milton.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 4/23/2021 7:00:00 PM

Thanks for the read, Daniel. It was pure fiction. Just my imagination run amuck!

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/23/2021 2:17:00 PM

Great couplet MILTON, I loved : Please don't look back and think I'll still be here I've shut the door and locked it tight, my dear. I wish you good luck in the contest, best regards

L Milton Hankins
Date: 4/23/2021 2:32:00 PM

Thanks so much, Lasaad. I hope it will do well.