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THE BANDS BREAKING UP

smashed the drums wrings sweating hands boom...boom trumpet puffed cheeks notorious red toot...toot...toot band sways feet tapping spit sprays silver flute fame’s up front poetically sweet audience yawns; cymbals crash dull drums rev it up 2/1/2020 Edward Ibeh’s Yalto Form Line 1 to 15: 3,4,2,4,5,3,2,3,2,3,3,5,6,1,5 syllables.

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Date: 2/3/2020 6:56:00 PM
This is an excellent Yalto, Kim:-) Really love it!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/3/2020 7:24:00 PM
Thanks so much! Great form!
Date: 2/2/2020 7:12:00 PM
i have yet to attempt the form, it looks complicated but you executed it nicely Kim... wonderful write! :) hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 9:34:00 PM
Thank you :)
Date: 2/2/2020 4:20:00 PM
Best to you on a unique write Panagiota xx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 4:47:00 PM
Thank you, Panagiota!
Date: 2/2/2020 1:01:00 PM
Damn... What an ending....don't know what a yalto is but good luck..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 1:31:00 PM
Thanks so much! :)
Date: 2/2/2020 8:35:00 AM
You created a chaotic feel with this one. It works well. A belated thanks for your visit.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 11:43:00 AM
Thank you, sweet friend!
Date: 2/2/2020 8:05:00 AM
Your poem flows with ease in Edward's new form (seems hard to execute), Kim. I hear the sounds of the band breaking up.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 11:43:00 AM
Thank you, Vijay! :)
Date: 2/2/2020 6:41:00 AM
Time to march...I like the idea of the write...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 7:52:00 AM
Thank you! Originally had the lines set up with their corresponding thought then decided to “break it up”
Date: 2/1/2020 11:02:00 PM
Seems like a very complicated form. Passed with honors. Hugs,
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2020 7:52:00 AM
Thanks! Just “breaking up” the band :)