Kim Rodrigues Poet Verse

The Bands Breaking Up

smashed the drums
wrings sweating hands

boom...boom
trumpet puffed cheeks

      notorious red
     toot...toot...toot

band sways
feet tapping

spit sprays
    silver flute

fame’s up front
poetically sweet

audience yawns; cymbals
crash

dull drums rev it up
      2/1/2020

Edward Ibeh’s Yalto Form
Line 1 to 15:  3,4,2,4,5,3,2,3,2,3,3,5,6,1,5 syllables.

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Edward Ibeh February 3, 2020 at 6:56 PM This is an excellent Yalto, Kim:-) Really love it! Kim Rodrigues February 3, 2020 at 7:24 PM Thanks so much! Great form!

Sandra Adams February 2, 2020 at 7:12 PM i have yet to attempt the form, it looks complicated but you executed it nicely Kim... wonderful write! :) hugs Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2020 at 9:34 PM Thank you :)

Panagiota Romios February 2, 2020 at 4:20 PM Best to you on a unique write Panagiota xx Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2020 at 4:47 PM Thank you, Panagiota!

Silent One February 2, 2020 at 1:01 PM Damn... What an ending....don't know what a yalto is but good luck.. Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2020 at 1:31 PM Thanks so much! :)

Richard Lamoureux February 2, 2020 at 8:35 AM You created a chaotic feel with this one. It works well. A belated thanks for your visit. Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2020 at 11:43 AM Thank you, sweet friend!

Vijay Pandit February 2, 2020 at 8:05 AM Your poem flows with ease in Edward's new form (seems hard to execute), Kim. I hear the sounds of the band breaking up. Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2020 at 11:43 AM Thank you, Vijay! :)

Arturo Michael February 2, 2020 at 6:41 AM Time to march...I like the idea of the write... Kim Rodrigues February 2, 2020 at 7:52 AM Thank you! Originally had the lines set up with their corresponding thought then decided to “break it up”