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The Attic of His Mind

In the attic of his mind So many thoughts he's searching to find..... Will he uncover the memories there,or lay his head down and continue to stare.. He sits on the pier and the thoughts of today just seem to take over to his dismay. He wonders why its so unclear,the cobwebs and thoughts he can't reveal.... I know they're somewhere,trying to get out His mind is foggy,the sun is hot Will thoughts tomorrow,untie the knots? 10yrs from now,will it matter at all Will he continue on... or giveup and fall. Hes home now from far away lands Where there was dust,death and sand..... He closes his eyes to clear his head.... But the dust in the attic.... He continues to dread.......

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Date: 2/4/2014 8:08:00 PM
Oh Agnes a nice write! This is very interesting! Great write! :) xoxo
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Agnes Bugeja
Date: 2/5/2014 12:11:00 AM
Thank you Chris..Im honored you liked it~~hugs~
Date: 2/4/2014 2:24:00 PM
Great write, Agnes. I get such feelings of dread and foreboding too. Maybe it is time to clean the attic of the things I do not need anymore and that bog me down.
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Date: 2/4/2014 4:03:00 PM
Taha thank you kind sir...Think sometimes if it were possible to clean the attic of our minds...could be a wonderful thing. ~~~~~hugs and have a pleasant evening~~~
Date: 2/4/2014 1:28:00 AM
The cerebral cortex stores countless memories and experiences. Good write. Just one questionable item exists at the end of your fifth line: "reveil" is not a word. Did you really mean "reveal" or "review"?
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Date: 2/4/2014 1:57:00 AM
Thank you Robert for the correction...Yes, I did mean "reveal"....i did edit it! ~~~hugs~~~
Date: 2/4/2014 1:11:00 AM
Oh I can Sooo Relate... love this piece... and I understand :)
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