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The Amazing Life

I was taking an early morning walk. A beautiful day had dawned, cool and crisp, with only a whisper of breeze. I am told it’s revitalizing; it will do my health much good. But, you see things to sadden you. Sometimes being early kills you;
sitting on a tree early bird scans the mowed lawn for an early worm
I am told too to play it right. Stay safe within your boundary. Stepping out of bounds can be dangerous. Tread the well-trodden path. Not to take unnecessary risks;
did everything right like fish stayed in my waters got caught and filleted
Life is amazing. It’s an endless maze of dead ends. It is not simple living a life -- It’s full of misgivings and mishaps. We couldn’t figure out the purpose of life even after a life-time of living;
like guinea pig wheel with all the running around and getting nowhere
I looked at the amazing stone faces of long-forgotten gods of ancient civilizations, From the Incas, the Aztecs, the Mayans, the Romans, the Greeks, the Persians to the Egyptians -- they all believed in a continued life in the great beyond;
I picked a stray stone and chiseled myself a god; then, I worshiped
~Haibun contest by Scott Thirtyseven

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 8/23/2015 9:12:00 AM
Interesting winning work..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 8/21/2015 9:11:00 AM
That last haiku just leaves so much to the imagination. In the middle line of your second prose I think you have a typo, I reckon you mean 'bounds'. Thank you for entering this great piece into my contest. Keep enjoying the haibun.
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/21/2015 10:03:00 AM
Thanks Scott. Appreciate very much.
Date: 8/21/2015 1:56:00 AM
Congrats on another wonderful win abdul with this amazing haibun!
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/21/2015 10:04:00 AM
Thanks Upma, appreciate your 'amazing' comments.
Date: 8/20/2015 6:37:00 PM
Abdul, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
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Date: 8/20/2015 12:05:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Abdul:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/19/2015 2:53:00 PM
Abdul, this is magnificent! What an enjoyable read! Good luck in the contest and I expect to see this beauty on the winners list! Pandita
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/22/2015 2:32:00 PM
Thanks Pandita, appreciate much your comments.
Date: 7/16/2015 2:07:00 PM
I like this, Abdul. You have made a difficult form seem so easy. Seamless even. Such irony in the last haiku. Goodluck! Kim
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/16/2015 2:16:00 PM
Thanks Kim. This form is very interesting; it satisfies my urge to write both, prose and poem. Appreciate your comments.
Date: 7/16/2015 12:24:00 PM
Its a challenging form isn't it Abdul - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/16/2015 12:59:00 PM
Yes, indeed! And interesting. Thanks Jan.

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