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The Agony Outside

The Agony Outside


    Still sitting here wondering why my reflection always fades
        And how that the phantom me causes shadows in the shade
            Flying over thoughtless things as my sanity starts to slide
                Breathing in the toxic fumes from the pollution of moral lies...

                So intelligent but don't understand the things I contemplate
            Lonely boy in the corner scrutinizing his own fate
        Why is everything so confusing now brain activity losing pace
    Crying on the shoulder of the reflection of his own face...

    Time is running out tripping over the edge of being too deep
        Life is just one endless day going months without sleep
            The progress within killing me may be running a bit too high
                Still left with doubt and wondering whether to live or to die...



                                     bmdavey@04/26/16

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/27/2016 3:57:00 AM

Brian, this is poetry at its finest. Deep and moving! #7

Brian Davey
Date: 4/27/2016 5:22:00 AM

Thank you so much Connie it is quite packed with raw emotion and feelings

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/27/2016 12:46:00 AM

Brian, I feel the pain around your words. The negative impact on this poem is felt throughout the poem. Well done, always. Linda

Brian Davey
Date: 4/27/2016 5:21:00 AM

Thank you Linda at one point not too long ago in my poetic career things like this is all that I wrote, of course that has all changed now and I owe a large part of it to you and other friends like you on this site who have helped nurture my talent, you guys are the best

Lin Lane

Date: 4/26/2016 3:05:00 PM

"...the phantom me causes shadows in the shade" That's dark and please pardon that pun. The agony outside is easier to get rid of then an internal agony. Of course the choice is to live. I really got into this one, Brian.

Brian Davey
Date: 4/27/2016 5:17:00 AM

I am so happy that this poem captured your attention, sometimes I've found out that my darker writes don't receive as much attention, I guess it is harder to deal with for a lot of people and puts them in a place that most everyone tries to avoid. Thank you so much