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That One 6

As the moon steals the skies from the sun
And the stars twinkle way up above
I wonder will I ever find that one 
who can share an undying  love




contest:'Brevity Poetry Contest No More Than Six Lines' 
Sponsor:Caren Krutsinger

Copyright © Brenda Chiri | Year Posted 2019

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Nick Trim Date: 6/5/2019 9:55:00 AM if you do, tell me how you did it cus i'm all out of ideas lol great write, sweet Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 6/7/2019 12:51:00 PM Well Nick seems I have run outta options! This is why I wrote the question to leave it out there in the cosmos to be answered when it was time or an answer could be found! Lol you see it's still out there so I'm assuming if I do it is not to be anytime soon! Lmao!muppet!;)

John Fleming Date: 5/29/2019 11:37:00 PM Surely, and I hesitate somewhat to disagree or correct you, Maureen... but is this not what in fact can only be described as "rhyming" poetry? Because not only does it rhyme -- but rhymes most beautifully!! A fav! Love this one, Brenda. Heaps of affection. :) john Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 6/5/2019 3:42:00 AM Ah thank you John you know I love your feedback on all my work! Lol and yes it is rhyming sorry Mo!;) but yes I should have known you would catch that John!;) All my affection! John Fleming Date: 5/30/2019 11:51:00 AM Lol :) john Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 5/30/2019 5:51:00 AM Oops!

Paul Callus Date: 5/29/2019 4:31:00 PM Yours is no easy question to answer, Brenda. That special person could be just round the corner...but if not, it's not the end of the world. As you said below, freedom can be equally rewarding. ~ Warm regards // paul Login to Reply Brenda Chiri Date: 6/5/2019 3:40:00 AM Thank you Paul! I never really expected an answer but it's nice to know you at least thought about it! Lol! As always thank you for the read!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 5/29/2019 7:57:00 AM You were once afraid of Free Verse, this is wonderful Brenda. I hope it's not an if but a wonder when. x Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 5/29/2019 9:18:00 AM That right there is awesomeness <3 Brenda Chiri Date: 5/29/2019 8:49:00 AM Mo lol afraid of free verse lol I was terrified of it!;) Well either way if or when I'm fine with either one! I've gotten so use to me and Aaliya that I don't know if I could live with anyone else! Lol my freedom to me is just as important!;) but thank you so much!