That Hurt

Stepped on a cheerio 
Heard a Crunch!

Slipped off a treadmill 
Seemed like a punch!

Saw Mr. Alligator 
Munch his Lunch!

Hit my head in the elevator 

          OUCH !

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Randy Freie

Date: 9/5/2025 11:00:00 AM

Ding! Going down Sir? I don't know about you, but my head looks and feels like a Cheerio most of the time. Call me Captain "Cracker" Crunch! Got milk? When you write, you're right! Give it hell, Ray!

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 11/18/2024 10:36:00 AM

Hello Ray Zottola, It sounds like you had a bad day. Enjoy your day my friend. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 11/18/2024 3:09:00 PM

Hello Ray Zottola, I am fine thank you. Oh, the Cheerios started it all. Ray, I will read the story. She does not sound like a good mother to her daughter. You know Ray you and your wife did a good deed to that little girl. Your welcome. i will bew reading more of your poetry.my friend. /Darlene/

Ray Zottola
Date: 11/18/2024 12:05:00 PM

It was the cheerio that started it first! How are you duin? Personally I haven't had much time to think let alone write. Except. I have a story for ya if you happened to read "Song for Jayla ". Readers digest version, My wife rescued a 10 year old girl from a crazy situation. My work reflects actual events with that little girl. Anyhow, I would have to explain in person. Too long to write here. We kept her for a few weeks until the police took her away to return to the mother. Almost were charged with kidnapping. The mother was useless and we felt we had to step up. The poem reflects my feelings. Best to you and thank you for your comments.

Brian Sambourne

Date: 7/1/2023 3:58:00 PM

Funny, clever, a winner. Congratulations! Brian

Ray Zottola
Date: 7/4/2023 1:36:00 PM

Ty Brian. I stepped on a cheerio! ??

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/9/2023 11:34:00 AM

Hi Ray ,hope things going well for you..TS a great idea to be grateful, each day we are alive. Panagiota

Ray Zottola
Date: 5/25/2024 6:02:00 PM

Panagi, hope you are doing well. Haven't written in a while. Any baseball news with the Gs? Business here is good, I just can't hire. No one to work and I'm getting old, well, older??. Touch base when you can. Z.

Panagiota Romios
Date: 7/23/2023 4:48:00 PM

Hot here Ray. 100. My daughter h just got back from Phoenix, where it was 117 each day, Grandson was in a baseball-tournament of 50 teams. She was so.glad to get back home! Hey Ray, glad you are still kicking. Your poem was super cool.I was just wring a kyruc myself. Mine is too long, Summertimes wishes. Pangie

Ray Zottola
Date: 7/23/2023 3:08:00 PM

Yo Panagiota, Hows things? Just a note to wave hello, im still kicking.