Sandra Haight Poet Rhyme

That Dismal Day

      What a dire and heartbreaking, dark, dismal day
when you crossed that threshold at heaven's doorway;
     our painful conception of death's bloodstained sword
that punctured our piteous hearts with dismay...
     now healed with acceptance of you with our Lord.

   
September 29, 2017
~2nd Place~
Contest: Rhyme Time With 5
Sponsor: Laura Loo
Judged: 10/10/2017

Required words to use: dismal  threshold  conception  bloodstained  piteous
Rhyme scheme: A-A-B-A-B

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Constance La France October 12, 2017 at 7:00 AM Sandra, beautifully penned and congratulations! Sandra Haight October 13, 2017 at 3:59 PM Thank you, Constance, for another thought-provoking contest and for my nice placement. Hugs, Sandra

Joseph May October 11, 2017 at 3:31 PM Beautifully penned Sandra...Congrats on your win Sandra Haight October 13, 2017 at 3:59 PM Thank you very much, Joseph. Sandra

Gregory Richard Barden October 10, 2017 at 11:03 PM Very dark and intricate - I enjoyed this very much, Sandra - congrats on your win! Sandra Haight October 13, 2017 at 4:01 PM Thank you very much, Gregory. The recent death of my dear sister-in-law sparked this one for me. Sandra

Jan Allison October 10, 2017 at 5:35 PM You wove the words in so brilliantly Sandra I too also managed to write it in 5 lines too:-)Congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Sandra Haight October 13, 2017 at 4:01 PM Thanks so much, Jan. We were thinking alike with this one! I appreciate your supportive comment and congratulations. Hugs, Sandra

Beautiful Scars October 10, 2017 at 6:01 AM So much said in such few words. Loved it sweet Sandra..thank you and congrats :) Sandra Haight October 13, 2017 at 4:02 PM Thank you for another inspiring contest, Laura, and for your nice comment and my placement. Hugs, Sandra

Vijay Pandit September 29, 2017 at 11:07 AM Lovely poem--well written and well executed--best for a win! Sandra Haight October 13, 2017 at 4:03 PM Thank you so much, Vijay! Sandra