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Tears Ressurected

Brooding clouds languished low, consoling the hills, 
as skies cast their tears onto brambles grown wild.
By chance, one small encounter would shadow the mood.
We found two age-old graves, buried deep under leaves.

As skies cast their tears onto brambles grown wild,
from a day blithe and buoyant, carefree and good,
we found two age-old graves, buried deep under leaves,
with names carved in granite in lone solitude.

From a day blithe and buoyant, carefree and good
I felt sudden anguish, arise from the past.
The names carved in granite, in lone solitude
resurrected despair, that was now ours, to bear

I felt sudden anguish, arise from the past!
Who could they be, this mother and child?
Resurrected despair, that was now ours to bear!
as skies cast their tears onto brambles grown wild.

Who could they be, this mother and child?
By chance one small encounter, would shadow the mood
As skies cast their tears onto brambles, grown wild,
brooding clouds languished low, consoling the hills



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5/18/13


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Gauthier Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 9:52 PM
Congrats on your win, Carrie. Well done.
Haight Avatar
March 29, 2018 at 4:39 PM
So very moving and beautifully written, Carrie. Congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win! Hugs, Sandra
Gentry Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 8:55 PM
Congratulations on your win with this melancholy Pantoum beautifully written.
Ashley Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 7:14 PM
Carrie, your sadly emotional content and imagery conveys lush and lovely melancholy; 'Brooding clouds languished low, consoling the hills'.. just brilliant! What an expressive way to start and end your moving poem. Congratulations on your spectacular win! ~Susan
Onclaud Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 5:19 PM
carrie, you are tops on soup and i miss you, your poetic brilliance... congrats with huggs!
Allison Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 4:00 PM
Such a moving piece Carrie, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Roper Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 11:43 AM
Congratulations on your win, Carrie, enjoyed reading! Have a nice Easter Hugs Eve ~`*
Scars Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 9:53 AM
just beautifully expressed sweet Carrie, you truly are one of the best here :) thank you and congratulations :)-luloo
Guzzi Avatar
June 2, 2013 at 6:40 PM
I'm always a sucker for emotion! ;) Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Kendrick Avatar
June 1, 2013 at 5:33 PM
Contains emotive and expressive winning lines..Congrats on your win..Sara
Arowolo Avatar
June 1, 2013 at 10:43 AM
Wonderful piece,Nice presentation,Carrie...Congrats on your well deserved win...
Harper Avatar
May 31, 2013 at 8:07 PM
Carrie, good consistent, sad tone and good form, you capture the mood and provide wonderful images. Congratulations on your win.
Oyewole Avatar
May 31, 2013 at 10:07 AM
Many Congrats to you Carrie on your well deserved win. AO
Ober Avatar
May 31, 2013 at 8:06 AM
Congratulations, my friend! You have written a truly stunning and moving piece of art here.
Babcock Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 5:15 PM
Beautiful poem Carrie. Just want to send birthday wishes for the 21st. Nice to share the day with you and Linda Marie. Happy Birthday Carrie. love phyl
Andresen Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 3:04 PM
- A unique poem from a lady who is very talented - no doubt this is a number one in the contest, Carrie! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Gildersleeve Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 12:36 PM
Carrie well done. It is visible and effective, putting thoughts in the mind of the reader. Deeply held view of life. I praise your originality. Warm S lies, Connie
Oyewole Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 10:33 AM
This is very good. Best wishes. AO
Bauer Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 9:46 AM
i'm not crazy about this form of poetry (i know it's for a contest, though) but i think you've beautifully created a sad and powerful mood in your poem. i was able to picture it so perfectly and felt like i was there with you.
Anglesey Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 3:27 AM
I think your poem is exquisite. The theme, descriptions and images make this absolutely stunning.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 7:07 PM
I just tried my first one of these. This is really good Carrie!
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