Paul Callus Poet Tanka

Tanka Tears

You had lots of fun
At the local where drinks flowed.
Night took you away...
One last breath in mangled wreck;
My heart aches. Why can’t I cry?

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Contest: Tanka Tears
Sponsor: Rick Parise
Chosen POTD ~ 14th Feb 2015

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Hija De La Luna February 20, 2015 at 9:45 PM Ahh well, this happens! Heartfelt write, Paul...and I like the question you threw at the end. It makes one think. Paul Callus February 21, 2015 at 10:06 AM Thank you Hija. Unfortunately these things happen...perhaps too often. Drink-driving is a no go. All the best. // paul

Cona Adams February 17, 2015 at 10:47 AM Sad, but wonderful Tanka, Paul. Thanks for sharing such deep feelings in such a powerful way. Paul Callus February 21, 2015 at 10:03 AM Thank you Cona; appreciate your lovely comments, and the visit! // paul

Andrea Dietrich February 15, 2015 at 5:31 PM congrats, Paul. I see you got a Poem of the day. Wonder if you made that list. I did not make it on. Anyway, it makes no difference. I saw many marvelous poems like yours with the theme of tanka tears. Paul Callus February 16, 2015 at 11:20 AM Thank you for the lovely comment and the congrats, Andrea. I too failed to make the final list, but that was no surprise....I take part in most of his contests, but I've never been on any of his winners' lists! We all judge differently. // paul

Sandra Haight February 14, 2015 at 10:54 PM Paul, congratulations on your poem being chosen Poem of the Day. Such powerful words of wisdom expressed in your well-written Tanka. Sandra Paul Callus February 15, 2015 at 10:54 AM I am pleased that you enjoyed and found wisdom in these few words, Sandra. Thank you. // paul

Tim Smith February 14, 2015 at 2:12 PM Such a tragedy Paul..congrats on POD Paul Callus February 15, 2015 at 10:36 AM Thank you Tim; unfortunately this has become a too common occurrence! All the best. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong February 14, 2015 at 1:15 PM Paul, congratulations on your poem being chosen as POTD. A very sad truth of driving drunk. Sure to be a winning entry. Cheers, Connie Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:23 PM Thank you for liking and commenting Connie. Wasn't expecting POTD!! Hope you're having a lovely Valentine's Day! All the best. // paul

Jack Ellison February 14, 2015 at 11:31 AM A definite POTD! Congrats my good pal! A 10+++ Cheers! Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:19 PM Thank you Jack...glad you enjoyed my friend!! All the best. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis February 14, 2015 at 10:36 AM Congratulations, my friend, Paul, for your poem being so rightfully selected the POD! Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:53 PM Many thanks Demi...congrats much appreciated my friend. // paul

Poesy Relish February 14, 2015 at 10:36 AM This is definitely a winning poem Paul.. congrats on POTD... nad! Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:55 PM Thank you for the congrats and the faith you show in this poem, Nadiya. All the best. // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 14, 2015 at 10:16 AM Back to congratulate you, Paul! A great choice for TPOD...hugs, Rhonda Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:18 PM Thank you Rhoda....I appreciate you revisiting! hugs // paul

Jan Allison February 14, 2015 at 9:55 AM Dropping back to congratulate you on POTD Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:27 PM Thank you Jan...took me a while to realize that it had been chosen POTD. This mail business has messed me up...so frustrating! Wish they'd fix it soon. Hope you've been having a lovely Valentine's Day!! hugs // paul

Robert Stoner Jr February 14, 2015 at 8:36 AM Congratulations Paul on Poem of the Day, good luck in the contest Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:33 PM Thank you very much Robert, on all accounts! All the best. // paul

Eve Roper February 14, 2015 at 8:06 AM Beautiful mournful write, Paul, so few word used, but tells it sad story. 7 Congratulations on Poem of the Day & Happy Valentine's Day. Blessings dear friend Eve Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 1:17 PM Thank you very much, Eve. Was taken unawares by POTD!! So glad you enjoyed it. Commented on your monkey love and sent you Valentine's wishes. All the best. // paul

Sara Kendrick February 14, 2015 at 6:05 AM Congrats on the poem of the day..It reads like a winner for the contest..Sad that people still drink and drive..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 6:31 AM Hi Sara...so lovely to have you stopping by today...May I wish you a very lovely Valentine's day!! All the best. // paul

Janet Eaton February 14, 2015 at 4:58 AM Congratulations on Poem of the day. Hugs Janet Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 6:23 AM Thank you Janet; I had not realized!! Have a lovely weekend. hugs // paul

Skat A February 14, 2015 at 12:56 AM Good tanka, Paul, :)Have yourself a sweet valentine's Day. ~SKAT LOVE~ Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 6:22 AM Thank you for stopping by Skat. Hope you're keeping well. Happy Valentine's Day!! hugs // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 13, 2015 at 6:19 PM Powerful emotions expressed, Paul...the tears will flow when you're ready to feel the pain and release it...sometimes a good cry helps bring closure...best wishes in the contest...sending a big hug (sometimes that helps, too), Rhonda Paul Callus February 14, 2015 at 6:20 AM Thank you for a lovely visit, Rhonda...appreciate your comments and the big hug! Have a lovely weekend. hugs // paul

Pandita Sietesantos February 12, 2015 at 5:42 PM Brilliant tanka that made me want to cry! Sometimes when people we love die suddenly and violently, we are in such shock, we can't cry. This is definitely a winner, my friend! Kindest regards. Pandita Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 8:25 AM Thank you for the comments and the faith you show in this poem, Pandita. I liked your 'lament' tanka, too, an I hope it does well. All the best. // paul

Ilene Bauer February 12, 2015 at 5:41 PM ooh - excellent ending, paul! Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 8:22 AM So pleased you like it Ilene; hope the judge does, too!! All the best. // paul

Debbie Guzzi February 12, 2015 at 2:10 PM A good entry Paul hope you are warm & well, still very cold & snowy here! Light & Love Paul Callus February 12, 2015 at 4:20 PM So pleased you like it, Debbie. Still cold here, but nothing when compared to your weather! All the best. // paul

Charmaine Chircop February 12, 2015 at 1:47 PM So deep this is..so powerful..So emotive-To my favs! Re my tanka,tnks for your encouragement,but i have a bit of phobia for contests but I do wish you to win cuz this is great. Paul Callus February 12, 2015 at 4:18 PM Thank you for reading, and for the lovely reaction...and for the fav! Your tanka is a very good one; would have been ideal for the contest. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen February 12, 2015 at 1:21 PM .... Goosebumps .... well done, Paul !!! - Hope your poem will win - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus February 12, 2015 at 3:08 PM Thank you Anne Lise..you are kind and supportive:) Take care. /x/ paul

Jan Allison February 12, 2015 at 12:27 PM Such a heartbreaking write Paul and a salutary message to all good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xxx 7 xxx Paul Callus February 12, 2015 at 3:54 PM Thank you Jan. Today I saw this video on FB made by the estranged husband...very sad and touching. hugs // paul