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Tanka Tears

You had lots of fun At the local where drinks flowed. Night took you away... One last breath in mangled wreck; My heart aches. Why can’t I cry? ------------------------------------- Contest: Tanka Tears Sponsor: Rick Parise Chosen POTD ~ 14th Feb 2015

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Hija De La Luna

Date: 2/20/2015 9:45:00 PM

Ahh well, this happens! Heartfelt write, Paul...and I like the question you threw at the end. It makes one think.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/21/2015 10:06:00 AM

Thank you Hija. Unfortunately these things happen...perhaps too often. Drink-driving is a no go. All the best. // paul

Cona Adams

Date: 2/17/2015 10:47:00 AM

Sad, but wonderful Tanka, Paul. Thanks for sharing such deep feelings in such a powerful way.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/21/2015 10:03:00 AM

Thank you Cona; appreciate your lovely comments, and the visit! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/15/2015 5:31:00 PM

congrats, Paul. I see you got a Poem of the day. Wonder if you made that list. I did not make it on. Anyway, it makes no difference. I saw many marvelous poems like yours with the theme of tanka tears.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/16/2015 11:20:00 AM

Thank you for the lovely comment and the congrats, Andrea. I too failed to make the final list, but that was no surprise....I take part in most of his contests, but I've never been on any of his winners' lists! We all judge differently. // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/14/2015 10:54:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your poem being chosen Poem of the Day. Such powerful words of wisdom expressed in your well-written Tanka. Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 2/15/2015 10:54:00 AM

I am pleased that you enjoyed and found wisdom in these few words, Sandra. Thank you. // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 2/14/2015 2:12:00 PM

Such a tragedy Paul..congrats on POD

Paul Callus
Date: 2/15/2015 10:36:00 AM

Thank you Tim; unfortunately this has become a too common occurrence! All the best. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/14/2015 1:15:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your poem being chosen as POTD. A very sad truth of driving drunk. Sure to be a winning entry. Cheers, Connie

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:23:00 PM

Thank you for liking and commenting Connie. Wasn't expecting POTD!! Hope you're having a lovely Valentine's Day! All the best. // paul

Jack Ellison

Date: 2/14/2015 11:31:00 AM

A definite POTD! Congrats my good pal! A 10+++ Cheers!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:19:00 PM

Thank you Jack...glad you enjoyed my friend!! All the best. // paul

Poesy Relish

Date: 2/14/2015 10:36:00 AM

This is definitely a winning poem Paul.. congrats on POTD... nad!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:55:00 PM

Thank you for the congrats and the faith you show in this poem, Nadiya. All the best. // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/14/2015 10:36:00 AM

Congratulations, my friend, Paul, for your poem being so rightfully selected the POD!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:53:00 PM

Many thanks Demi...congrats much appreciated my friend. // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 2/14/2015 10:16:00 AM

Back to congratulate you, Paul! A great choice for TPOD...hugs, Rhonda

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:18:00 PM

Thank you Rhoda....I appreciate you revisiting! hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 2/14/2015 9:55:00 AM

Dropping back to congratulate you on POTD Paul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:27:00 PM

Thank you Jan...took me a while to realize that it had been chosen POTD. This mail business has messed me up...so frustrating! Wish they'd fix it soon. Hope you've been having a lovely Valentine's Day!! hugs // paul

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 2/14/2015 8:36:00 AM

Congratulations Paul on Poem of the Day, good luck in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:33:00 PM

Thank you very much Robert, on all accounts! All the best. // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 2/14/2015 8:06:00 AM

Beautiful mournful write, Paul, so few word used, but tells it sad story. 7 Congratulations on Poem of the Day & Happy Valentine's Day. Blessings dear friend Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 1:17:00 PM

Thank you very much, Eve. Was taken unawares by POTD!! So glad you enjoyed it. Commented on your monkey love and sent you Valentine's wishes. All the best. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/14/2015 6:05:00 AM

Congrats on the poem of the day..It reads like a winner for the contest..Sad that people still drink and drive..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 6:31:00 AM

Hi Sara...so lovely to have you stopping by today...May I wish you a very lovely Valentine's day!! All the best. // paul

Janet Eaton

Date: 2/14/2015 4:58:00 AM

Congratulations on Poem of the day. Hugs Janet

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 6:23:00 AM

Thank you Janet; I had not realized!! Have a lovely weekend. hugs // paul

Skat A

Date: 2/14/2015 12:56:00 AM

Good tanka, Paul, :)Have yourself a sweet valentine's Day. ~SKAT LOVE~

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 6:22:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by Skat. Hope you're keeping well. Happy Valentine's Day!! hugs // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 2/13/2015 6:19:00 PM

Powerful emotions expressed, Paul...the tears will flow when you're ready to feel the pain and release it...sometimes a good cry helps bring closure...best wishes in the contest...sending a big hug (sometimes that helps, too), Rhonda

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2015 6:20:00 AM

Thank you for a lovely visit, Rhonda...appreciate your comments and the big hug! Have a lovely weekend. hugs // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 2/12/2015 5:42:00 PM

Brilliant tanka that made me want to cry! Sometimes when people we love die suddenly and violently, we are in such shock, we can't cry. This is definitely a winner, my friend! Kindest regards. Pandita

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 8:25:00 AM

Thank you for the comments and the faith you show in this poem, Pandita. I liked your 'lament' tanka, too, an I hope it does well. All the best. // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/12/2015 5:41:00 PM

ooh - excellent ending, paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2015 8:22:00 AM

So pleased you like it Ilene; hope the judge does, too!! All the best. // paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/12/2015 2:10:00 PM

A good entry Paul hope you are warm & well, still very cold & snowy here! Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 2/12/2015 4:20:00 PM

So pleased you like it, Debbie. Still cold here, but nothing when compared to your weather! All the best. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/12/2015 1:47:00 PM

So deep this is..so powerful..So emotive-To my favs! Re my tanka,tnks for your encouragement,but i have a bit of phobia for contests but I do wish you to win cuz this is great.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/12/2015 4:18:00 PM

Thank you for reading, and for the lovely reaction...and for the fav! Your tanka is a very good one; would have been ideal for the contest. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/12/2015 1:21:00 PM

.... Goosebumps .... well done, Paul !!! - Hope your poem will win - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/12/2015 3:08:00 PM

Thank you Anne Lise..you are kind and supportive:) Take care. /x/ paul

Jan Allison

Date: 2/12/2015 12:27:00 PM

Such a heartbreaking write Paul and a salutary message to all good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xxx 7 xxx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/12/2015 3:54:00 PM

Thank you Jan. Today I saw this video on FB made by the estranged husband...very sad and touching. hugs // paul