Tanka 8

Tanka 8 your dark eyes... your lips are just barely visible despite the darkness as veiled as they are exposed tender... and perhaps wounded

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Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/3/2013 5:46:00 PM

Wow...The whole tanka is a stunner, but the last line is absolutely LOADED! I'm speechless...

Jack Jordan
Date: 10/3/2013 8:48:00 PM

Tim, thank you for the compliment. I really appreciate it... Jack

Sandra Adams

Date: 9/30/2013 12:33:00 AM

lovey tanka Jack...I really like this one...

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/28/2013 1:19:00 PM

deep write full of feelings Jack well written Shadow x smile

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/28/2013 1:21:00 PM

Thanks, Shadow, for the nice comment... Jack

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/28/2013 10:12:00 AM

oh my, you floored me , jack... sensitive piece so lovely!..:) huggs

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/28/2013 1:22:00 PM

Thanks, Nette. I always respect your opinion... Jack

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2013 8:55:00 AM

wow, this is gorgeous, Jack!!!

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/28/2013 10:06:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. That's a very nice compliment... Jack

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/28/2013 4:45:00 AM

Nice theme, Jack

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/28/2013 7:28:00 AM

Thank you. I appreciate the comment... Jack