Tanka 6

Tanka 6
	
	hot summer garden
	brown asparagus... okra...	
	bird-pecked tomatoes
	no delicacies this year
	to counter winter’s cold breath

summertanka

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Richard Lamoureux

August 8, 2013 at 10:13 PM

Fantastic, you gave us a picture and then sent us to the future. Love the imagery here.

Jack Jordan

August 9, 2013 at 7:47 AM

Thanks, Richard. Unfortunately, it's all true... Jack

Charlotte Puddifoot

August 8, 2013 at 4:39 PM

hi jack, thanks for your kind comments on all three of my poems, lizzie siddal was addicted to laudanum...re your tanka here, it's very atmospheric and vivid and captures beautifully the contrast between summer and winter, love those "bird-pecked tomatoes" and love the last line too :)

Jack Jordan

August 8, 2013 at 4:42 PM

I did enjoy your poems, and I appreciate your comments here. However, I really don't like the bird pecks. Jack