Shane Cooper Poet Tanka

Tanka 2b

Night following day
Commonplace and unremarked
Scales fall from our eyes
Starlight pierces mind and soul
God revealed if one but looks!





A poem dedicated to my friends Eileen, Mary Jo and Anne-Lise. Thank you for you patience with me.
with speciasl thanks to Andrea for her help.

This is a reworking of my previous poem Tanka 2. I hope that this is more in line with the true form of a Tanka. I would really appreciate feed back on this.
Thanks Shane
posted 31/03/2015

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Andrea Dietrich March 30, 2015 at 2:12 PM shane, this one WAS improved over the first one. I like that contrast of the common night and seeing it with new eyes! Shane Cooper March 30, 2015 at 3:30 PM Thanks Andrea, I think this is about the limit of my ability in this form. I just cannot find the words to make it beautiful. Thank you for your help, it was appreciated. love Shane xxx