Carolyn Devonshire Poet Senryu

Tangy Lips Extend

underage, hiding
Tom Collins with lemon twist –
suddenly mature

tangy lips extend
bitter taste turns to sweet bliss –
future husband found




*By Carolyn Devonshire for Michael’s “A Kiss Like a Fruit” contest.
October 10, 2011
On our first date, John took me to a bar where he knew the bartender well.  John did not know I was underage – he’d never asked.  LOL

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Kash Poet November 18, 2012 at 11:35 AM Hmmmm....good one!!

Carol Sunshine Brown November 7, 2011 at 6:10 AM A belated congratulations I am sending you for your win in Michael's "A Kiss Like Fruit" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Charlotte Puddifoot November 5, 2011 at 3:10 PM congrats on your win in the contest carolyn, I really like how you drew on personal experience to write your senryu :-)

Kash Poet November 5, 2011 at 6:31 AM Congrats Carolyn on your win.I liked it very much first time around.

Andrea Dietrich November 4, 2011 at 8:10 PM I was hung up on trying to figure out who tom collins was and then it occurred to me it might be the name of some drink. hahaha. Anyway a delightful story in this one .Congratulations on your win.

Gwendolen Song November 4, 2011 at 3:17 PM I love this one. Carolyn....the cops are still looking for you....lol. Young love is just like this...your personal experiences add such flavor to your writing. I am still stuck on your wedding rehearsal poem....now u gave me something else to envision. ha ha. Gwendolen

Michael J. Falotico November 4, 2011 at 2:41 PM Great entry and a sweet story of the begining of love with a lemon... loved it.. Congrats on your 3rd place win in my contest... love Michael

Gwendolen Song October 15, 2011 at 7:56 AM Carolyn---a lovely warm kissing poem for Michael's contest. The note bene is wonderful too. Hope this finds you well. Oh, to be where u are now!

S.Jagathsimhan Nair October 11, 2011 at 12:18 PM love this kiss that changed one's life..

Jack Horne October 11, 2011 at 11:53 AM lovely warm nostalgic piece, my friend

Kash Poet October 11, 2011 at 5:04 AM Very nice Senryu here Carolyn.Best wishes.

John Loving Iii October 10, 2011 at 10:13 PM maybe he knew. jhl John Loving Iii October 10, 2011 at 10:14 PM a man with a beard.

John Smith October 10, 2011 at 9:52 PM Sweet with a touch of bitter. Just like most couples. Well writ.

Suzanne C. Goudreau October 10, 2011 at 9:26 PM A lovely Senrya that captures the moment most charmingly. Very well accomplished and very moving. Thank you for sharing and May God Bless!

Russell Sivey October 10, 2011 at 8:35 PM What a wonderful piece here, Carolyn! I love the "bitter taste turns to sweet bliss" line that you have written. You can feel the passion within the poem!! Great job!! Russell Sivey October 10, 2011 at 8:44 PM You will do well in the contest!