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Tangy Lips Extend

underage, hiding
Tom Collins with lemon twist –
suddenly mature

tangy lips extend
bitter taste turns to sweet bliss –
future husband found




*By Carolyn Devonshire for Michael’s “A Kiss Like a Fruit” contest.
October 10, 2011
On our first date, John took me to a bar where he knew the bartender well.  John did not know I was underage – he’d never asked.  LOL

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Kash Poet Date: 11/18/2012 11:35:00 AM Hmmmm....good one!! Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 11/7/2011 6:10:00 AM A belated congratulations I am sending you for your win in Michael's "A Kiss Like Fruit" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 11/5/2011 3:10:00 PM congrats on your win in the contest carolyn, I really like how you drew on personal experience to write your senryu :-) Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 11/5/2011 6:31:00 AM Congrats Carolyn on your win.I liked it very much first time around. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/4/2011 8:10:00 PM I was hung up on trying to figure out who tom collins was and then it occurred to me it might be the name of some drink. hahaha. Anyway a delightful story in this one .Congratulations on your win. Login to Reply

Gwendolen Song Date: 11/4/2011 3:17:00 PM I love this one. Carolyn....the cops are still looking for you....lol. Young love is just like this...your personal experiences add such flavor to your writing. I am still stuck on your wedding rehearsal poem....now u gave me something else to envision. ha ha. Gwendolen Login to Reply

Michael J. Falotico Date: 11/4/2011 2:41:00 PM Great entry and a sweet story of the begining of love with a lemon... loved it.. Congrats on your 3rd place win in my contest... love Michael Login to Reply

Gwendolen Song Date: 10/15/2011 7:56:00 AM Carolyn---a lovely warm kissing poem for Michael's contest. The note bene is wonderful too. Hope this finds you well. Oh, to be where u are now! Login to Reply

S.Jagathsimhan Nair Date: 10/11/2011 12:18:00 PM love this kiss that changed one's life.. Login to Reply

Jack Horne Date: 10/11/2011 11:53:00 AM lovely warm nostalgic piece, my friend Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 10/11/2011 5:04:00 AM Very nice Senryu here Carolyn.Best wishes. Login to Reply

John Loving Iii Date: 10/10/2011 10:13:00 PM maybe he knew. jhl Login to Reply John Loving Iii Date: 10/10/2011 10:14:00 PM a man with a beard.

John Smith Date: 10/10/2011 9:52:00 PM Sweet with a touch of bitter. Just like most couples. Well writ. Login to Reply

Suzanne C. Goudreau Date: 10/10/2011 9:26:00 PM A lovely Senrya that captures the moment most charmingly. Very well accomplished and very moving. Thank you for sharing and May God Bless! Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 10/10/2011 8:35:00 PM What a wonderful piece here, Carolyn! I love the "bitter taste turns to sweet bliss" line that you have written. You can feel the passion within the poem!! Great job!! Login to Reply Russell Sivey Date: 10/10/2011 8:44:00 PM You will do well in the contest!