Pandita Sietesantos Poet Quatrain

Talking In Your Sleep

Talking in Your Sleep

You’ve never been totally honest with me,
hoarding secrets that were buried deep.
You thought they were safe in Pandora’s Box…
but you revealed them all in your sleep!

As you moaned a name that was not mine,
our warm bed became a sheet of ice.
While you’ve been enjoying a red hot flame,
I’ve been crowned Queen of Fools’ Paradise.

No apologies, no confessions needed; 
your guilty conscience gave you away.
And as a new day dawns, I’ll be all right…
just won’t be around for a replay.


01/12/2017

Contest:     Any Poem Written in January 2017
Sponsor:    Laura Loo
Placement: 3rd

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Susan Ashley October 29, 2017 at 8:34 PM An amazing write dear Pandita. Your title is awesome and your theme is heartbreaking but the voice in the poem is strong and determined... not at all the 'Queen of Fools Paradise'. An excellent and heartfelt poem, told with conviction and passion! I truly enjoyed your poem my sweet friend.. Hugs! ~Susan Pandita Sietesantos November 13, 2017 at 12:48 PM Hi Susan, thank you, my friend for continuing to praise my work. You kind words do inspire me to write more. Thank you, thank you. Best wishes and hugs! Pandita

John Michaels October 24, 2017 at 2:40 AM A heart-felt write, Pandita, but your determination and strength of character shine through. All the best, John. Pandita Sietesantos October 26, 2017 at 3:06 PM Hi John, I'm so glad you stopped by to leave me such a lovely compliment! Hugs. Pandita

Mark Martin February 18, 2017 at 1:04 PM Congratulations on your great poem Pandita! The indiscretion of sleep! :-) Pandita Sietesantos February 19, 2017 at 9:41 AM Dear Mark, thank you for stopping by to read this piece and to leave your sweet compliments! Best wishes. Pandita

Beautiful Scars February 11, 2017 at 1:44 PM so heartbreaking to have this happen to someone- thank you and congrats :)-luloo Pandita Sietesantos February 11, 2017 at 7:49 PM Laura, thank you very much for honoring this piece with such a high placement in your contest! I am so thrilled! Have a great weekend! Pandita Pandita Sietesantos February 11, 2017 at 7:19 PM Dear Laura, it is so nice to receive your wonderful complimentary words which are always appreciated! Thank you so much for the visit! Pandita

Freddie Robinson Jr. January 28, 2017 at 7:38 AM A cool rebuttal, Pandita. The subconscious confession, eh. I love the title, the theme, especially him being caught in his dream. A great piece of poetry, dear. Your gritty honesty is the best part of this poem. Loved it! I do have to come visit more often. Love and more love to you and yours. Pandita Sietesantos January 28, 2017 at 6:52 PM Awwwww! I so appreciate your wonderful feedback, support and kind compliments which mean a lot to me!! Love to you and yours too! Hugs! Pandita

Phionah Renitah January 21, 2017 at 3:26 AM Great yet unbelievably sad Pandita Sietesantos January 21, 2017 at 11:17 AM Hi Phionah, I so appreciate your kind visit! Thank you so much! Pandita

Kika Ayala January 13, 2017 at 7:26 AM I really enjoy reading your poetry and as you can tell, I am a fan! A-7! Kika Pandita Sietesantos January 13, 2017 at 8:54 AM Thank you, my dear! You made my day! Have a great weekend. Pandita