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2/16/2025 for Skating Upon Saturn's Rings Poetry Contest sponsored by Sara Jama

As planets go, I like the earth. With the blue-green orb, you get your money's worth. It has a lot of things that squirm. The best one of all is the earthworm. But once in a while a fellow gets bored, so I built a spaceship and jumped aboard. Maybe you're sayin' you don't believe. Come on mister, I wouldn't deceive. Now that Pluto's been rejected, Mercury is the first one I selected. "I'm closest to the sun", he can boast, so, we two had a weenie roast. Venus cancelled my date with a fever, She was so hot, I believe her. Warning earth, this lovely maiden said, "In greenhouse gasses, I am laden".    Skipping over to good 'ol Mars, I asked, "why that red face of yours? "He said, "I've been watching the third rock over. It's embarrassing, and you can have your rover".  Jupiter's a planet that's truly jumbo, so, I figured he'd know where to get good gumbo. He said, you might wanna go down south. I said, "well, then, shut my mouth!" Next up, for your consideration, I decided on some recreation. The perfect place is on Saturn's rings. I roller skated there - man that place swings. I really didn't want to talk about Uranus, a discussion, offensive or heinous. Though, you might not believe this one bit, my last stop was Neptune.  That's pretty much it.

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Date: 2/17/2025 12:59:00 AM
You covered them all in perfect rhyme. Good luck if the is for a contest.
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David Crandall
Date: 2/17/2025 8:19:00 AM
Thanks Hilda!
Date: 2/16/2025 2:29:00 PM
Last time I skated on Saturn's rings I got stardust up my nose. Never again. Nice write David
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Date: 2/16/2025 5:08:00 PM
Thanks Tom! I'm surprised I haven't seen you there. I guess it's a pretty big place.
Date: 2/16/2025 2:07:00 PM
David, great write. I hope you were using warp drive. Mr Scott can give you a couple extra ergs out of that dilithium!
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David Crandall
Date: 2/16/2025 5:07:00 PM
Haha, good ol' Star Trek! Thanks Oliver!
Date: 2/16/2025 10:51:00 AM
david - i thoroughly enjoyed this delightful romp in outer space! love the humor!
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David Crandall
Date: 2/16/2025 5:06:00 PM
Thanks Ilene, glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 2/16/2025 10:30:00 AM
LOL, David! Love your take on the contest, bring mankindspeak to the planets! :)
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David Crandall
Date: 2/16/2025 5:05:00 PM
Thanks Kim, they love plain talk out there!

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