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Tales From Riverbank

grey heron stalks prey
a silent assassin poised ...
sun breaks through dark clouds

Writing Challenge 3, May 2019, Nature Haiku Poetry Contest
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5/24/19

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2019

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Eve Roper Date: 5/27/2019 9:47:00 PM Beautiful image painted by your pen, Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve Login to Reply

Peter Dome Date: 5/27/2019 1:17:00 PM Wow. A incredible clever write Jan. a sure winner for me. pete. X. Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 5/27/2019 10:30:00 AM The sun breaking silently through the clouds ... like the grey heron; two images that compliment each other. Congratulations on placing first, Jan! Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 10:52:00 AM Thanks Paul I do struggle with the turn in the third line but this one I hope is a proper Haiku:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France Date: 5/27/2019 9:36:00 AM Jan congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful haiku and I love the image too! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 10:52:00 AM Thanks Constance, I must download the pics i took last week - this one is off the web:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/26/2019 2:57:00 PM A nice turn there, Jan! Congrats on a top win. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 4:59:00 AM thanks Andrea i do struggle with that final line, am proud of this poem:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 5/26/2019 1:21:00 PM - Returns with a congratulations, Jan :) - // hugs :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 5:00:00 AM thanks Anne-lise:-) I am so behind with comments I must find time to be on soup, will hopefully be easier this week as we have no exam work and the kids are on holidays:-) hugs jan xx

Tania Kitchin Date: 5/26/2019 4:54:00 AM A beautiful haiku Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 4:59:00 AM I'm really proud the way this one turned out:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray Date: 5/25/2019 5:41:00 PM I also have a heron I watch often Jan. Their steadfast pace inspires calm I find. Best of luck for the contest. Tough competition for me tonight I have read so far. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 4:58:00 AM I've been at work for 7 am as I have had issues sleeping so take the time to walk by the harbour and park and watch the wildlife, I've taken some pics I must download them!:-) hugs jan xx

Arturo Michael Date: 5/25/2019 7:35:00 AM Sorry for that prey...it wouldn't see what's coming...Nice imagery...All the best Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 4:57:00 AM thanks Arturo i guess its survival of the fittest:-( hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta Date: 5/24/2019 4:56:00 PM You may want to watch hunks instead as herons go to considerable trouble to ensure the fish goes down head first (but you do have ample time to think whilst they are going about it). Bonne chance! Aloha! Rico Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 4:55:00 AM lol Rico:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 5/24/2019 4:07:00 PM - It is quiet and patient ... a fun bird with long neck and long legs ... great haiku, Jan :) - GL in the contest :) - Best wishes to you and your hubby :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/27/2019 4:55:00 AM Thanks so much Anne-Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Toney Date: 5/24/2019 3:11:00 PM Excellent suspense, Jan! Now he has to deal with his shadow ;) ~Mark Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/24/2019 3:52:00 PM I've had terrible issues sleeping with hubby away and been getting up at silly oclock this week, getting into work an hour and a half early and walking down by the park and harbour and taking pics of the wildlife, the grey heron in the harbour is my favourite he is there every day in one of two places and I spend a long time observing him so it was he who inspired the poem:-) hugs Jan xx