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Tales From Riverbank

grey heron stalks prey a silent assassin poised ... sun breaks through dark clouds Writing Challenge 3, May 2019, Nature Haiku Poetry Contest Sponsored by Dear Hear 5/24/19
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Roper Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 9:47 PM
Beautiful image painted by your pen, Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
Dome Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 1:17 PM
Wow. A incredible clever write Jan. a sure winner for me. pete. X.
Callus Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 10:30 AM
The sun breaking silently through the clouds ... like the grey heron; two images that compliment each other. Congratulations on placing first, Jan! Hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 10:52 AM
Thanks Paul I do struggle with the turn in the third line but this one I hope is a proper Haiku:-) hugs jan xx
La France Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 9:36 AM
Jan congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful haiku and I love the image too!
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 10:52 AM
Thanks Constance, I must download the pics i took last week - this one is off the web:-) hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
May 26, 2019 at 2:57 PM
A nice turn there, Jan! Congrats on a top win.
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 4:59 AM
thanks Andrea i do struggle with that final line, am proud of this poem:-) hugs jan xx
Andresen Avatar
May 26, 2019 at 1:21 PM
- Returns with a congratulations, Jan :) - // hugs :)
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 5:00 AM
thanks Anne-lise:-) I am so behind with comments I must find time to be on soup, will hopefully be easier this week as we have no exam work and the kids are on holidays:-) hugs jan xx
Kitchin Avatar
May 26, 2019 at 4:54 AM
A beautiful haiku Jan!
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 4:59 AM
I'm really proud the way this one turned out:-) hugs jan xx
Murray Avatar
May 25, 2019 at 5:41 PM
I also have a heron I watch often Jan. Their steadfast pace inspires calm I find. Best of luck for the contest. Tough competition for me tonight I have read so far.
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 4:58 AM
I've been at work for 7 am as I have had issues sleeping so take the time to walk by the harbour and park and watch the wildlife, I've taken some pics I must download them!:-) hugs jan xx
Michael Avatar
May 25, 2019 at 7:35 AM
Sorry for that prey...it wouldn't see what's coming...Nice imagery...All the best Jan
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 4:57 AM
thanks Arturo i guess its survival of the fittest:-( hugs jan xx
Leffanta Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 4:56 PM
You may want to watch hunks instead as herons go to considerable trouble to ensure the fish goes down head first (but you do have ample time to think whilst they are going about it). Bonne chance! Aloha! Rico
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 4:55 AM
lol Rico:-) hugs jan xx
Andresen Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 4:07 PM
- It is quiet and patient ... a fun bird with long neck and long legs ... great haiku, Jan :) - GL in the contest :) - Best wishes to you and your hubby :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
May 27, 2019 at 4:55 AM
Thanks so much Anne-Lise:-) hugs jan xx
Toney Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 3:11 PM
Excellent suspense, Jan! Now he has to deal with his shadow ;) ~Mark
Allison Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 3:52 PM
I've had terrible issues sleeping with hubby away and been getting up at silly oclock this week, getting into work an hour and a half early and walking down by the park and harbour and taking pics of the wildlife, the grey heron in the harbour is my favourite he is there every day in one of two places and I spend a long time observing him so it was he who inspired the poem:-) hugs Jan xx
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