Jan Allison Poet Free verse

Take My Breath Away

Sirens cut through 
the stillness of the night
blinding lights flashing
Police and paramedics 
battle to save you

Chest compression
rhythmic pulses
desperate attempts
to breathe life
into cyanosed lips

Now you rest
under a gray granite gravestone ...
I’m bereft, I feel so blue

Blue Contest

1/7/19

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Craig Cornish January 13, 2019 at 9:04 AM Jan, I kept coming back to this - life in its most poignant place and the powerful, rapt presentation is what carries it. Jan Allison January 13, 2019 at 10:31 AM Thanks Craig I am so happy you liked my interpretation of the blue theme:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. January 11, 2019 at 8:40 PM Hi Jan, I am happy to see you on the winners list! Congratulations my friend:-) Alexis Jan Allison January 12, 2019 at 1:19 AM I'm delighted to place Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

P.S. Awtry January 11, 2019 at 7:43 PM Now that is blue! That title—so good—works on so many levels. Congratulations! Jan Allison January 12, 2019 at 1:19 AM Thanks PS you are the first one to mention the title:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong January 11, 2019 at 5:50 PM I am so happy to see this on the winning list Jan. Congratulations my friend! Well done! : ) xxoo Jan Allison January 11, 2019 at 5:53 PM Thanks Connie I'm delighted:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands January 11, 2019 at 4:44 PM Congratulations for your win Jan :) Jan Allison January 11, 2019 at 4:58 PM thanks Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier January 11, 2019 at 3:41 PM Back with congrats, Jan. Well done,. Jan Allison January 11, 2019 at 4:34 PM thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire January 11, 2019 at 2:39 PM Wow, you rose so well to this challenge, Jan. Those blue lights and sirens prepare us for bad news. So sad is your ending. Congratulations on your win in Craig's contest. Best wishes, Carolyn Jan Allison January 11, 2019 at 3:26 PM Thanks Carolyn I'm delighted to be on the list:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven January 7, 2019 at 12:15 PM HI Jan, this is an excellent write. You take us to the heart of your theme with such real words. The vision comes through so strongly, the reader is there. This reads like a winner for the Blue contest. This is a situation that would make anyone who saw it Blue. Excellent work Jan. Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XX Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 12:16 PM Thanks Mike, it will be interesting to see what Craig makes of my take on the blue theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos January 7, 2019 at 8:59 AM Every time we pass a car accident on the high way and I happen to see body bags, it ruins my next two days, and if I happen to see the paramedics working on someone its even worse, I internalise so much sometimes. Good luck in the contest Jan Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 10:15 AM that must be horrible to witness Jennifer, I'm lucky Ive never seen it only on the tv:-( hugs Jan xx

Joseph May January 7, 2019 at 8:52 AM A poignant verse...Very nicely penned Jan.. Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 10:15 AM thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina January 7, 2019 at 8:10 AM Very clever, Jan. Hope neither of us see the lights too soon...Best wishes for a win...hugs // Charlie xx Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 10:15 AM I have too much living to do Charles!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen January 7, 2019 at 7:28 AM - Dark blue ... skillfully written, Jan :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 10:14 AM thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Vijay Pandit January 7, 2019 at 7:10 AM This is so uniquely different than others I have seen on the theme. A clever use of blue without being obvious. Nicely done, Jan. Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 10:14 AM Thanks Vijay I wanted to surprise Craig, will be interesting to see if it places he is a difficult judge to please:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso January 7, 2019 at 2:51 AM wow, I have to know what poison you used, might need some!!! LOL :) Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 3:06 AM I'm admitting to nothing which might incriminate me lol you're aware I've been accused of things I've not done so I reserve the right to remain quiet lol lol:-) hugs jan xx

Kai Michael Neumann January 7, 2019 at 2:10 AM Cyanosed lips. How much more blue can it get? Lots of love and Peace, Kai Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 2:39 AM Thanks Kai:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. January 6, 2019 at 10:37 PM WoW! Jan, You took the theme blue and nailed it. When I read the title I didn't know what to expect. What you wrote "blew" my expectations out the window. I hope to see this on the winners list. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend:-) Alexis Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 2:38 AM Craig is a tough sponsor to please so I am taking a chance with this theme:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier January 6, 2019 at 10:24 PM Wow. It doesn't get bluer than that! Beautiful penning, Jan. Jan Allison January 7, 2019 at 2:37 AM Thanks Line:-) I thought I'd go for something different! :-)hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith January 6, 2019 at 7:56 PM Blue for sure, well done Jan, best wishes in the contest... Jan Allison January 6, 2019 at 7:59 PM Thanks Charlie I much prefer humour but this just came to me so I thought I'd enter it in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger January 6, 2019 at 7:44 PM This was such an amazing poem. Good luck in the contest my friend. Jan Allison January 6, 2019 at 7:46 PM Thanks Caren, I rarely enter Craig's contest as I feel I'm not skilled enough to appeal his tastes, but this dark one surfaced this evening and I thought I'd take a chance in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx