Caren Krutsinger Poet Blitz

Swing of the Highway

Highway swing
Highway dance
Swing in and out
Swing carefully
Out to stay alive
Out there on the freeway
Alive still
Alive to swerve
Swerve all about
Swerve cautiously
Still moving
Still dancing
About to smash
About to crash
Moving slowly
Moving not at all
Smash heard
Smash song
Slowly turn
Slowly open eyes
Heard metal
Heard brakes
Turn and look
Turn and feel sad for them
Metal crumpled
Metal jumbled
Look away
Look toward
Crumpled car
Crumpled truck
Away I go
Away from this sad
Car speeds up
Car racing soon
Go on truck
Go on car
Up a hill
Up toward clouds
Truck screeches on brakes
Truck slams them hard            
Hill so daunting
Hill so steep
Brakes hold
Brakes keep us in place
Daunting day
Daunting and slow  
Highway Dance
Highway Nerve
Nerve of steel, we drivers, now
Dance of highway, daily dance

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Rhona Mcferran October 2, 2018 at 8:23 PM This is amazing- like Line said, it does make the reader feel like they're actually there zigzagging in and out of traffic! Wonderful job on this! (This reminds me of a car-window sign I saw one time that read: "Adults on Board- We Want To Live, Too!") ;D

Line Gauthier September 29, 2018 at 6:21 AM Well penned, Caren. Your short lines even make us feel that we are behind the wheel zigzagging in and out... or being zigged and zagged around us. Well done. Caren Krutsinger September 29, 2018 at 6:47 AM Thank you Line. I really appreciate it. A Blitz is difficult to figure out. I always have to write down from one to fifty, and then add what is to be done on each line. This is one I will probably not memorize, but it was a challenge and I like them.