Swimming For Love

Stroke one,
breath you'll do fine.
sencond stroke,
can you see the finish line?
He's waiting for you there.
Stroke three,
somethings wrong.
Fourth stroke,
i cant breath
No more strokes.
Can you see the light?
you can see the finish line and him
Swim there instead
Swim, faster!
The light it's fading away with him
Thump on your chest, eyes flutter open
You see him,
he's leaning over you,
hair wet from the water,
you'r own eyes wet with water
but its not plain water,
tears of joy.
He leans down.
"You won."
His sweet lips touch yours
There is your prize

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 12/16/2008 1:10:00 PM
Awesome write Sammy. I like the way you ended this. It is sweet and romantic. I'm doing ok. Busy with the holidays. I'm happy to hear your ok and that Justin is home for the holidays. Thank you for your thoughtful comment and Happy Holidays. Love Robin
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Date: 11/18/2008 4:50:00 PM
What up dude?!
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Date: 11/17/2008 3:17:00 PM
Are you going to call me back or what?!
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Date: 11/15/2008 3:56:00 PM
HELLO?!
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Date: 11/15/2008 3:39:00 PM
Why can't you talk on the phone anymore tonight?
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Date: 11/15/2008 3:35:00 PM
Hey I'm crying. . .
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Date: 11/15/2008 3:31:00 PM
Hey I'm talking with david. . .
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Date: 11/15/2008 2:01:00 PM
i have nothing against gay people as long as they have a good sence of humor and don't cry all the time like some people i know. jhl
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Date: 11/14/2008 9:08:00 AM
OH sam is samatha. now i get it. good work. can i come to the slumber party too. john
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Date: 11/14/2008 9:04:00 AM
it's like the form"I don't know" i was fine untill i got to the kiss. it started out to be a wonderful poem about Jesus then at the end it was twisted around. not that there's anything wrong with gay dreams, but.....JHL
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Date: 11/10/2008 4:50:00 PM
I mean not this weekend but next weekend on the 22nd I'll invite you and my friend Onissa. . .
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Date: 11/10/2008 4:44:00 PM
My computer won't let me writ it on my computer but this weekend I'm inviting you to my slumber party and you can read it at my place if you want or if you're allowed to come. . . It's for my birthday (the slumber party is. . .)
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Date: 11/10/2008 4:39:00 PM
I love you, You're the only one that I ever think about, Duh! ;) I'm fishing writting my first chapter. . .
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Date: 11/10/2008 4:34:00 PM
I'm thinkin bout you sweetie what else is there to think bout?!
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Date: 11/10/2008 4:32:00 PM
You should read the poem boy meets by Amber Meli
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Date: 11/10/2008 4:29:00 PM
AWWWWWWW!!!!! it's sooooo cute sam I love it!! So what are you doin cutie?
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