John Lawless Poet Triolet

Sweet Summer Road - Visual 3

Sweet Summer Road – visual 3


Sweet summer, as emerald feelings rose,
trees, gnarled by duty, waving guidon flags
arched entry to the paths the lovers chose.
Sweet summer, as emerald feelings rose,
Love’s simple chore – make poetry from prose,
hold tight the dream on rolling hills and crags
Sweet summer, as emerald feelings rose,
trees, gnarled by duty, waving guidon flags.



5/28/2015



submitted to – One Lovely Summer Triolet – Poetry Contest
sponsor – Andrea Dietrich

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Kim Merryman June 13, 2015 at 8:35 PM A wonderful write, John! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Sandra Haight June 13, 2015 at 7:55 PM Beautiful, John! Very nice verbal painting of that visual. Congratulations on your win! And thank you for you nice comment and congrats on my poem, "The Country Road." Sandra

Skat A June 13, 2015 at 6:24 PM John, Congratulations on your LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET ----- SKAT :-)

Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 5:31 AM wonderful imagery John many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx John Lawless June 13, 2015 at 7:20 AM Thanks Jan for your continued support.

Andrea Dietrich June 13, 2015 at 12:42 AM John, the only one thing I could fault with this one was the fact that it was not strictly iambic; however, the tone, theme and quality of language are so incredible, it is well deserving of a top win. Such a lovely summer triolet. Congrats in my contest John Lawless June 13, 2015 at 7:18 AM Andrea, another great contest(and I hate writing Triolet - but enjoy torturing the muse). Thanks for the high placement in spite of the flaws. To paraphrase a great movie line "Thank you Ma'am may we have another!"

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders May 29, 2015 at 9:05 AM Incredible imagery, John! I love the sentiments of summer love and adventure...Thanks for the visit today (I hate camping, but I love a beautiful sunset). Hugs, Rhonda John Lawless May 29, 2015 at 9:24 AM Appreciate your stopping by to comment, keep writing.

Constance La France May 29, 2015 at 8:15 AM John, this is outstanding. So beautiful and a awesome 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, let me tell you a story John Lawless May 29, 2015 at 9:23 AM My pleasure, I try to drop in on as many poets as possible and squeeze in a few new ones each day but time....life's predatory stalker...haunts my efforts.

Nette Onclaud May 29, 2015 at 3:56 AM tremendous imagery leading to a languid mood... a beauty! huggs John Lawless May 29, 2015 at 7:08 AM OH, Nette, "a languid mood"....if only I had been able to weave that into the poem. Thanks for stopping to read and comment.

Skat A May 28, 2015 at 10:18 PM She will love this John Lawless May 29, 2015 at 7:06 AM Yeah SKAT, she's a cruel woman - but fair.

Casarah Nance May 28, 2015 at 6:55 PM Oh I really like that line-loves simple chore-make poetry from prose...you have a wonderfully imagery here, painting perfectly, well done :) John Lawless May 29, 2015 at 7:05 AM Casarah, always appreciate your support and input. Triolets torment me but Andrea dangles the bait so temptingly.....

The Grahamburglar May 28, 2015 at 6:17 PM Awesome write, John. This will be a winner for sure! Great job and easy 7 from me. The Grahamburglar May 28, 2015 at 6:31 PM I just wrote my first one yesterday, and it was certainly a challenge. Yours is executed much more gracefully. I admire your talent. John Lawless May 28, 2015 at 6:26 PM Thanks Preston, I always struggle with the little triolet troublemakers.