Sweet Explosion

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for Charles Messina's 8X8x8x8 Poetry Contest

In this poem you must use the rhyme pattern AABBCCDD in (BOTH) the first word of each sentence and the last words of each sentence. Also, each line has to have 8 syllables (checked by Howmanysyllables.com)

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I am aflutter around you. Sky appears in your eyes of blue. Feeling lost in your gaze I am. Reeling in my mind, it's like WHAM. Oh, sweet explosion of delight! So joyfully my heart takes flight. May i never lose your love's blast. Say to me you want this to last.

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Len Gasun

Date: 3/27/2025 8:50:00 AM

Gorgeous poem my dearest friend. I love this a lot, the feeling flow and everything. Belated Hearty Congratulations on your win and this excellent rhyme poem! Thanks for sharing. Belated thank you also for the soupmail. My apology for the late response. God bless you, your family and poetry. Lots of hugs from me to you.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/16/2025 4:45:00 PM

Andrea, nice job on this one considering the constraints! The thought I have is that after you have these feelings and it doesn't work out, how do we deal with it for the rest of our life? LOL!!! We would need another even bigger wham perhaps! I haven't figured it out completely yet but I'm close!! We have to focus on what's at hand!! Smiles!

Margaret Foster

Date: 2/8/2025 3:38:00 AM

I like this Andrea. The title is just perfect for the poem . WHAM indeed. It flows very smoothly for a difficult form. Good luck in the contest Cheers.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/6/2025 10:11:00 PM

This is such a juicy contest challenge, I hope I've willing days to give it a go. You did so well. I wonder if it took nearly as much revising for you as I know it will for me. Contents deliver emotional impact. You've got it going on! Hugs ... CayCay

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/7/2025 3:22:00 PM

please try it, dear.

Paige Hind

Date: 2/6/2025 9:11:00 PM

Hope it lasts! Lovely...

John Read

Date: 2/6/2025 6:40:00 AM

Hi Andrea your poem is certainly a blast, another contest winner for sure. xx

Gary Radice

Date: 2/6/2025 4:02:00 AM

Very romantic. Andrea, you should get a job writing the inside of valentine cards. :) Cheers - Gary

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/6/2025 9:25:00 AM

thanks, i actually had a student of mine that described his girlfriend to me and I wrote a love poem for him to give her. haha

Ink Empress

Date: 2/6/2025 2:27:00 AM

Awwn this is such a romantic one sweet Andrea! You write romance also so well! A prolific poet you are that can write on any theme in any form! Brilliant rhymes too! Perfect for valentines mood right now! Pleasure always reading your poems! Sending you light always