Sweat

Sweat ruled as I tried to draw near, When I got an eyeful of you. Each moment then, passed by in fear. Although if too shy, then I would rue, The gift life blessed me to pursue!

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Panagiota Romios

Date: 10/27/2023 5:44:00 PM

10/28. Congratulations.I am back to say, I am glad for you. Panagiota

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/9/2023 8:33:00 AM

A fun choice of word David, and a fun write. Well done! Congratulations! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/8/2023 12:00:00 PM

Thanks for partipating in my contest and congrats, David. It's interesting for me what you used to illustrate Sweat!

Deb M

Date: 9/27/2023 8:13:00 AM

Ha David l like this relatable tale….some sweat, some go red and some get tongue tied!! Debx

Panagiota Romios

Date: 9/25/2023 5:27:00 PM

A simple response from me, I think I used to pant more than sweat. And was far from shu! Retired wild one,with no advice, I sense you to be more than intelligent.)) Pangie xx Well penned Quintain! 2penned

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/25/2023 10:00:00 AM

Very creative and well done my friend. A fate that every man has experienced.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/25/2023 6:32:00 AM

- Take a deep breath .... smile and say hello ... the one who doesn't dare doesn't win, David :) - Great written :) -