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Swan Lake

swan
                              you glide
                        < so gracefully
                                     on a
                                    cool
                                     blue
                                       lake
                                          or on
                                             teal 
                                                 pond       water making ripples with
                                                  your    five fluffy cygnets. You use
                                                   tall   bull rushes and reeds for security
                                                     from predators who may lurk in         
                                     (  ( ( (      ((( deep murky water or in the azure sky) )     
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                                                      tiny
                                                  cygnets
                                             < stay with
                                                       the
                                                     cob
                                                     and
                                                     pen
                                                      for        protection until formation of
                                                       their   snowy white feathers and
                                                         finally  their wings form. Then  
                          ( ( (they are free to fly the nest and find their mate for life ))
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Peter Dome January 8, 2017 at 10:29 AM Ooh I could do with a cob now bacon and egg.. Love this visual fluffy feathered poem. well done. Can you eat swan eggs?.Pete.

Maurice Rigoler December 27, 2016 at 8:01 PM A writer and now an graphic artists?! Amazing. There pictographs were very popular in earlier centuries in English literature. I've tried a few and are not easy to do. Great job, Jan. Thanks for the stop by, and best to you in the coming new year – unless Mr. Trump screws the next four years for all of us. / M Jan Allison December 28, 2016 at 11:18 AM I am not 'arty' Maurice but I did try hard for the contest:-) I do love the fact they take me totally out of my comfort zone and i try new styles. I found this quite a challenge!:-) As for Trump and Brexit we have to wait and see what challenges lie ahead for us all:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus December 27, 2016 at 4:51 AM Wow! Truly a work of art...beautiful shapes...you make use of that blue dragonfly to conceal many hidden talents, Jan! Hugs // paul Jan Allison December 27, 2016 at 9:58 AM You are so sweet Paul. I am not 'arty' but wanted to try hard for Flo's contest ... she is such a fabulous person and a friend to many on soup:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish December 26, 2016 at 4:44 PM What a clever "shape" poem - and a nice photo to go with it Great job! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 4:46 PM Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. December 26, 2016 at 1:28 PM WoW! Jan, you did a fantastic job. I think you just secured a place on the list with this write. Swans are so beautiful and graceful creatures. No need to wish you luck. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis PS, I hope you and your loved ones had a Merry Christmas. Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 1:33 PM I am not 'arty' so i found the contest a real challenge - I originally wanted to do about a cigarette and smoking lol but I changed my mind and wanted to do a bird and this is the result:-) we had a very quiet Christmas as i have another chest infection and we couldn't have mum near us but she had a great time at the care home - just me and hubby for the first time since 1992:-) Hope 2017 is brilliant for you Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green December 26, 2016 at 12:11 PM Now that is how it is suppose to be done. Wow Jan, this is fantastic and such beautiful. You just have to love swans, they are majestic creatures and do choose a mate for life. Beautiful my friend. This should take top honors with ease. Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 12:22 PM Aww thanks - they are so so beautiful and wonderful to observe:-) I'm not sure what Flo is looking for with the contest Chris as long as my poems are read and enjoyed that is the important thing to me:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis December 26, 2016 at 2:44 AM Beautiful, both in form and content dearest, Jan. Hugs and a seven! Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 4:55 AM Thanks so much Demetrios I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Len Gasun December 26, 2016 at 12:18 AM Well done concrete poem my dear friend, Jan! I love it. Super 7! love lots and hugs, Leonora Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 4:58 AM Thanks Leonora its my first attempt at this form:-) hugs jan xx

Deborah Burch December 25, 2016 at 11:23 PM Well done Jan!! Aren't swans wonderful!! Good job on your concrete!! Wishing you the best for the contest!! Big Hugggs!! Deb Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 5:04 AM They are so beautiful Deb:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer December 25, 2016 at 7:50 PM wow! this looks amazing, jan, and sounds very lovely, too... Jan Allison December 26, 2016 at 5:05 AM Thanks so much Ilene it was quite a challenge to create this form as I am not at all 'arty':-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper December 25, 2016 at 7:42 PM This is marvelous, Jan,,,,,, a winner already. Hugs Eve Jan Allison December 25, 2016 at 7:44 PM I'm not sure if it is 'poetic' enough or even if its what flo is looking for - my initial thoughts was to do one about smoking but then decided as dad had lung cancer it would have ended up being pretty dark so thought a little more lighthearted would be better - place or no place in the contest i enjoyed the challenge - i am sure you will come up with a cracking poem you are so creative:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong December 25, 2016 at 3:54 PM Wow Jan, this is so impressive and creative! I love it that they mate for life. We have only black swans here and they are beautiful. I bet this does wonderfully in the contest! 7 ; ) Jan Allison December 25, 2016 at 4:01 PM Thanks for your lovely comment:-) I've only ever seen white swans Connie - all swans in the UK belong to the Queen... they are so beautiful to look at but they can be quite aggressive especially when they have young:-( I'm not sure if this is what Flo is after but its all my muse could come up with - I was toying with doing a cigarette shape but it seemed quite boring when I thought of doing an bird shape and it turned into a swan:-) Hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior December 25, 2016 at 3:02 PM Beautifully done my dear Jan...I love swans...best of luck in the contest...god bless & Happy Holidays...^WW^ Jan Allison December 25, 2016 at 3:05 PM They are such graceful birds ^WW^. I have a wonderful photograph I was given many years ago by a friend I worked with it is of a Swan with a line of about 9 cygnets... I wish I has actually been able to witness it for myself. Hope you have a wonderful time during the festive period:-) hugs Jan xx