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Write one new senryû on the topic of collective nouns of animals.‘Title’: It is usually left untitled, therefore: The first line of your senryû. No more than ONE verb per poem and it is ideally in present tense.

Passerine= is any bird of the order Passeriformes which includes more than half of all bird species. "Sometimes" known as perching bird.

susurration shifts jet cumuli passerines~ starlings flight sculpture

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David Kavanagh

Date: 8/13/2024 1:49:00 PM

Well you’ve certainly set the standard here Anaya in this beautifully presented and written senryu, I’m sure you’ll be well rewarded in the contest, a middle line to die for, cheers David

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/13/2024 3:38:00 PM

Ty David you are too kind. As for the new lens; it's one dimensional, dead eyes, when set in black n white so I took the lid off. UPDATE 4/25 Updated the avatar!

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/13/2024 3:32:00 PM

Hey I see you have a new lens too!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/13/2024 3:03:00 AM

Lovely birds in their flight. They rest at night on trees. Don't leave your car beneath, they will have to be washed :)

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/13/2024 6:44:00 AM

Many times, at the recycling center parking lot. The seagulls of all birds, far from the ocean spend their time perching, waiting for the car (white, they recognize it) that brings bird seed, they flock to the car and in formation. I took some pictures, I watch as they eat then poop! TY for your visit, Victor!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/12/2024 8:59:00 PM

Lovely pictures to set your poems to!

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/13/2024 6:38:00 AM

TY Kim, I think so too!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/12/2024 5:51:00 PM

Sculpture of the most pristine quality, Anaya. Gorgeous description! Voila! ~ Gershon

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/12/2024 8:12:00 PM

TY GW! Blessings

Duke Beaufort

Date: 8/12/2024 4:38:00 AM

Anaya, lovely poem…I can hear the rustling and envision the sudden changes. You’ve made something lovely. The word choice of a cloud of perching birds makes my brain fly a bit, which is a reflection of the leap of imagination you bring to bear. Smiling.

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/12/2024 9:40:00 AM

A passerine is any bird of the order Passeriformes which includes more than half of all bird species. "Sometimes" known as perching birds. After more study, you're are most right dear Duke! Passerines' have three toes forward, one backward, when sitting on a perch, non-passerines don't. We get only one verb, I chose shift but tried to use it as a in shifts as a noun, too complicated I'm using it as a verb. Hope that helps. TY Duke! Let's call this one abstract.

Silent One

Date: 8/11/2024 1:10:00 PM

An awesome arrangement of words here... Love the imagery you have created..

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/11/2024 1:16:00 PM

Nouns aren't so difficult as I thought they can either be a verb or a noun, tricky, whew! TY Silent One, nice to see you.

Yann Rolland

Date: 8/11/2024 3:21:00 AM

beautiful , i am always marvelled with

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/11/2024 10:02:00 AM

TY Yann! Me too. I look up in the spots I know they'll be putting on the avian show for me. It's at the windiest parts of the valley, I take pictures! Say cheese/fromage ;)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/11/2024 12:08:00 AM

I have always marveled at how birds fly like an orchestrated dance...this gem reflects the glory of avian flights...amazing senryu, Anaya!

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/11/2024 10:01:00 AM

The wind above enhances their dance, it truly is something to watch in silence, seagulls being the noisiest of the creature's. TY, Nette for your lovely comment!