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Write one new senryû on the topic of collective nouns of animals.‘Title’: It is usually left untitled, therefore: The first line of your senryû. No more than ONE verb per poem and it is ideally in present tense.

Passerine= is any bird of the order Passeriformes which includes more than half of all bird species. "Sometimes" known as perching bird.

Susurration Shifts

susurration shifts jet cumuli passerines~ starlings flight sculpture
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Kavanagh  Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 1:49 PM
Well you’ve certainly set the standard here Anaya in this beautifully presented and written senryu, I’m sure you’ll be well rewarded in the contest, a middle line to die for, cheers David
Anaya Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 3:38 PM
Ty David you are too kind. As for the new lens; it's one dimensional, dead eyes, when set in black n white so I took the lid off. UPDATE 4/25 Updated the avatar!
Kavanagh  Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 3:32 PM
Hey I see you have a new lens too!
Buhagiar Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 3:03 AM
Lovely birds in their flight. They rest at night on trees. Don't leave your car beneath, they will have to be washed :)
Anaya Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 6:44 AM
Many times, at the recycling center parking lot. The seagulls of all birds, far from the ocean spend their time perching, waiting for the car (white, they recognize it) that brings bird seed, they flock to the car and in formation. I took some pictures, I watch as they eat then poop! TY for your visit, Victor!
Rodrigues Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 8:59 PM
Lovely pictures to set your poems to!
Anaya Avatar
August 13, 2024 at 6:38 AM
TY Kim, I think so too!
Wolf Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 5:51 PM
Sculpture of the most pristine quality, Anaya. Gorgeous description! Voila! ~ Gershon
Anaya Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 8:12 PM
TY GW! Blessings
Beaufort Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 4:38 AM
Anaya, lovely poem…I can hear the rustling and envision the sudden changes. You’ve made something lovely. The word choice of a cloud of perching birds makes my brain fly a bit, which is a reflection of the leap of imagination you bring to bear. Smiling.
Anaya Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 9:40 AM
A passerine is any bird of the order Passeriformes which includes more than half of all bird species. "Sometimes" known as perching birds. After more study, you're are most right dear Duke! Passerines' have three toes forward, one backward, when sitting on a perch, non-passerines don't. We get only one verb, I chose shift but tried to use it as a in shifts as a noun, too complicated I'm using it as a verb. Hope that helps. TY Duke! Let's call this one abstract.
One Avatar
August 11, 2024 at 1:10 PM
An awesome arrangement of words here... Love the imagery you have created..
Anaya Avatar
August 11, 2024 at 1:16 PM
Nouns aren't so difficult as I thought they can either be a verb or a noun, tricky, whew! TY Silent One, nice to see you.
Rolland Avatar
August 11, 2024 at 3:21 AM
beautiful , i am always marvelled with
Anaya Avatar
August 11, 2024 at 10:02 AM
TY Yann! Me too. I look up in the spots I know they'll be putting on the avian show for me. It's at the windiest parts of the valley, I take pictures! Say cheese/fromage ;)
Onclaud Avatar
August 11, 2024 at 12:08 AM
I have always marveled at how birds fly like an orchestrated dance...this gem reflects the glory of avian flights...amazing senryu, Anaya!
Anaya Avatar
August 11, 2024 at 10:01 AM
The wind above enhances their dance, it truly is something to watch in silence, seagulls being the noisiest of the creature's. TY, Nette for your lovely comment!
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