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Surreal Nature

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the old grist mill leans nestled in the rocky bank red fall leaves surreal
The swift red stained creek that energized the mill's wheel still runs over ancient rocks on its course to the mighty sea. Its course unchanged for eons but the use of its steady resources remain. The red leaves upon the trees surrounding the creek will soon be spent.Their usefulness soon to be gone..
the red sweet gum leaves fall twirling land 'pon hard rocks... crayfish hide beneath
Small white water rapids gush over the stony bottom and tiny waterfalls continously rushing forth to the nearest river and then onward to the mighty ocean touching on all continents then coming home to rush forth once again..Rushing water that supports all life upon this good earth..The gushing water that supported the grist mill and the small community..The water is still there and the mill is still there but the people have deserted the once thriving way of life..
lapping water flows as people flow far away... bream wait spring to spawn
Sponsor: Broken Wings Contest: Haibun Written: September 21, 2013

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Date: 10/25/2013 1:11:00 PM
I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win Sara love xx
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Date: 10/25/2013 10:43:00 AM
Sara, congrats, awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT <3
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Date: 10/25/2013 9:53:00 AM
Sara, lovely win..... always~ LINDA
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Date: 10/25/2013 7:24:00 AM
Sara so visual and exciting full of life and colour congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/25/2013 4:58:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, sara
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:29:00 PM
I remember reading this one.......love it so much !! The scenery makes me think of a painting!
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Date: 10/24/2013 7:58:00 PM
what a beautifully crafted haibun...love how you did the haiku first ...congrats on your splendid win :)
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Date: 10/24/2013 6:01:00 PM
You are a gifted poetess, congratulations!
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Date: 10/24/2013 5:33:00 PM
congrats on a great win Sara
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Date: 9/23/2013 5:36:00 PM
NIce one, Sara, your prose is particularly well crafted.
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Date: 9/22/2013 9:37:00 PM
Beautiful Sara...so sad people have abandoned these places..nice poem.good luck.....
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Date: 9/22/2013 4:03:00 PM
love this, my friend
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Date: 9/22/2013 3:09:00 PM
amazing imagery, sara.. i like the visual description in this piece.. so well written!..:) huggs
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Date: 9/22/2013 7:53:00 AM
Hi Sara, Great verse here..I enjoyed reading this morning.. Ken
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Date: 9/22/2013 5:31:00 AM
hi Sara love this GL in contest you may want to correct spelling in your last prose line. Only one s in deserted have a super day Shadow x smile
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Date: 9/22/2013 1:34:00 AM
Excellent. lovely verses. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 9/21/2013 7:58:00 PM
This is a very awesome and glorious write my friend! I truly loved reading this amazing poem this evening! What a powerful piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 9/21/2013 4:46:00 PM
Very beautiful verses! A glorious choreography of nature! Good luck!
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